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  • Review, proofreading and art at your service

    In need of art, proofreader or just need someone’s input on your story? Look no further, but bare in mind if...you wish for me to review your story, I will only review the first episode because you know how the saying goes “you only get one chance to make a good impression, so make that first impression count”. The first episode is there to determine whether I wish to spend my passes on your story or not, which is why that episode is free.

    Please, state what service you require in your comment, whether it’s art(background, cover art etc...) or just a review. I hope you get the gists.
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    Last edited by KKB; 12-18-2017, 01:11 PM.

  • #2
    Hey! I’d be glad if you read my story and told me your thoughts!

    Story Name: See the Real Me
    Story Summary: Alex is fine with her uneventful life. That is, until a new student comes to her school. His name is Ed and he’s blind.
    Tagline: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4674412178309120

    Thank you in advance!

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    • Arina1998
      Arina1998 commented
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      Thank you for your advice! I’m glad you’ll continue reading my story. I’ll definitely work on my dialogues and try to make them perfect

    • Stephotte
      Stephotte commented
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      This story is amazing I swear. I am motivated to start my own but It won't be as good as this.

    • Arina1998
      Arina1998 commented
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      Stephotte oh no no no, no saying such things! Check your DMs on Insta, I’ve written to you 😊

  • #3
    Hello. Could you please review my story??

    Title: Where do we go from here?
    Author: Lawful Evil
    Genre: Mystery
    Episodes: 5 ongoing
    Description: Have you ever heard about a miracle? No? Let the story show you the world of magic, spells and poisons.
    Style: INK
    Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6330841475842048

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    • KKB
      KKB commented
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      Do you need help proofreading your story, because some of the dialogues have left me scratching my head!?! I most admit though, the plot is there and it doesn’t seem too cliche.

  • #4
    Hey, I'd really appreciate your input on my story! Let me know if you have any thoughts!

    Title: City of Angels 1987
    Author: Five Star Equilibrium
    Genre: Action
    Episodes: 5 (complete)
    Style: INK
    Summary: Set in the 1980s in Los Angeles; you're a hitman who must kill the leader of an underground criminal organization.
    Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4907449772539904

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    • KKB
      KKB commented
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      Alright, let’s start with the grammar error I’ve picked up. When Rob says “if you don’t know the answer, THAN don’t answer”. THAN is used to form comparisons between two things. For example; “I’m more THAN capable to...” THEN is usually used to express a sense of time, what comes next or what used to be. For example; “And THEN he said I wasn’t good enough...” So, the correct term should’ve been “If you don’t know the answer, THEN don’t answer”. You probably knew that, though.

      Anyhoo, the animation left a bad taste in my mouth and could use a bit of dusting. Throughout the whole episode, the animation was more of a straight line rather than a zigzag especially the ending.

      LUKE
      You really must love the sound of your own voice, huh?

      For a more dramatic ending, have you considered removing most of the dialogues in the final scene?

      After Rob says “Do you want to hear about my experience with the last girl I’ve been with?”

      LUKE should give ROB one cold stare and turn his back away from him.

      LUKE tunes Rob out as he continues to chat a whole loada bull.

      LUKE
      Any last words?

      LUKE points the gun at ROB

      Then zoom in on ROB, but before you do that use the finger snap animation to get the perfect reaction from ROB and end the scene.

      Don’t force the dialogues, let them flow because at times they felt a bit forced. But overall it’s different and I like different.

    • Five Star Equilibrium
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      I appreciate the input = )

  • #5
    KKB yes, I need a proofreader

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    • #6
      I would love a review please!!

      Titile: The Past Shapes Us
      Author: Solete
      Chapters : 10(ongoing)
      Description: People are just reflections from their past
      who can't hide who they are.
      Can they change who they become?
      Genre: Mystery

      Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4735516289007616

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      • Solete
        Solete commented
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        If you could help me with proofreading too, please!
        I've been getting a lot of comment regarding my bad grammar XD

      • KKB
        KKB commented
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        There weren’t that many errors and the story itself was quite decent. I fixed what needed fixing though.
        Last edited by KKB; 12-21-2017, 01:37 PM.

      • Solete
        Solete commented
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        Thank you!! You've been so helpful!

    • #7
      Hey there! I would love a review on a first impression, here's my story info:

      Title: Widened Eyes
      Author: miss robee
      Genre: Romance/Drama
      Style: Limelight
      Episodes: 5 (ongoing)
      Description: A surprise encounter shakes up Mila's quiet life and it looks like that surprise is determined not to let her get away.
      Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5241798792970240

      IG: missrobee.episode
      Twitter: missrobee_ep

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      • #8
        Hey, I would love your input on the first episode of my story. Here is the info:

        Title: Star Power: Forged Identity
        Author: Marenee
        Genre: Drama
        Style: Limelight
        Episodes: 3 (Ongoing)
        Description: Lidiya's whole life has been planned out. What happens when she decides to live out her dream, but in secret? *CC*
        Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6265678735736832
        Instagram: mama.episode

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        • #9
          Author: Shella DeRoi
          Genre: Drama
          Episodes: 6 (to be continued)
          Style: Limelight
          Description:A school filled with secrets, lies and deception. Will you come out unscathed, or will you be dragged down with the lies.
          Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4925289943269376

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          • #10
            Hi! Yes please, I need some serious help with proofreading.
            Have gotten several feedback regarding my grammar, but since I'm not a native speaker, it's pretty hard to pinpoint which one needs correction
            Would also appreciate it if you would review the story

            Here's the detail:
            Title: When Life Gives You Lemons (considering of changing the title it into something less common/more catchy)
            Author: JasmineLilac
            Episodes: 10 (ongoing)
            Genre: Romance/Drama/some Comedy
            Style: INK
            Description: Because lemons are only bitter when you decide to eat it whole.
            Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5153612251660288

            Thank you!

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            • KKB
              KKB commented
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              That’s done with and you mentioned you might be pondering whether to change the title or not. I’ve sent you a suggestion if you still wish to go down that route.

          • #11
            Hi I would love it if you could review my story!
            The grammar may not be perfect since English is not my first language.

            Title: Mei
            Author: Manna
            Genres: Mystery/ Action/ Romance
            Episodes: 3 (Ongoing with weekly updates)
            Style: INK
            Instagram: @manna.episode

            Descriptions: It was almost as if he was waiting for me to come to his rescue, a trap set for me. Instead he fell into mine...
            Link:
            http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6274704344219648

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            • #12
              Please give mine a read .. thank you

              Title : Death Stalker
              Description: Her touch is black & poisonous, she is revenge in its purest form and they all must pay
              Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4717798803243008
              Instagram: episode_deathstalker
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              • KKB
                KKB commented
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                There was something about the pace of the story that, I couldn’t put my finger on it. At times the directing seemed a little off, especially with the spot directing. Take the office scene in zone 3, the characters were bigger than the objects in the background. When using spot directing you need to take a lot of things into account. For example; the objects in the background, how far they from the screen etc...also you need to work on your Punctuation(s) and brushing off some of your dialogues, because there were times where you’d think “damn! That’s well good” and within seconds they’d feel like “meh” and forced.

              • Melly8Harley
                Melly8Harley commented
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                Thank you for the feedback, I will take that into account. I try harder with my punctuation as its always been a weakness of mine.
                With spot directing i guess i never really took the behind objects into account so thank you i will defiantly work on improving sizes going forward.

            • #13
              KKB my first chapter is customization.
              I want art and maybe review if you can thanks
              Name : SHAMELESS
              Style: LIME LIGHT
              genre: DRAMA AND ROMANCE
              Author name: Lime light storyANA
              Please could you share .
              here's the link http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6209978671169536

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              • KKB
                KKB commented
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                Can I get a brief description of the story, please...just to get a quick insight. And do you have a particular style in mind when it comes to art?

            • #14
              I'd love a review
              Story:
              A Twist Of Faith
              Author: Lexi Lu
              Style: Limelight and 3 chapters ongoing
              Description: Destiny visits you and explains you need to save Damian- and yourself. Will you be able to in time?

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              • #15
                Hi KKB ! It would be so nice if you could review my story! I want a super HONEST opinion!!
                It's my first story, but it's been months that I'm working on it!

                Title : The Soul Gems
                Author : VeeZ4ra
                Genre : Fantasy/Romance
                Style : Ink
                Episodes : 10 ongoing (Maybe 11 in the following days )
                Description : 5 years after "The War of Dimensions" where her big sister died, Liv meets her correspondent Nate. Surprises await!
                Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5287259781857280

                INT. MINIATURE - NIGHT.jpg

                Thank you and enjoy!

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