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this make it sound like they are togheter. I would change claimed to lost.
I am not english but this seem wrong, I would say when he sends you a wedding invitation. instead.
and this I would change completly.
here is how I would maybe write it, though I also am not good at description.
5 years ago, you let your first love go. but when you receive his wedding invitation, you start to regret lossing him, but can you let him go in time for his big day.
I just want to include my opinion real quickly but the description you wrote is actually great, and I think it is better than the other one because the other one sounds kind of not placed together to its full potential. (lol Idk how to explain it, so that’s the best way I could explain it ) And btw “lossing” it’s actually losing.
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