I’m going to put more pauses there I’m a fast reader so I didn’t realize they were too fast
I’ll take care of it
At the start and at the end, I think it’s only on the first chapter and one later on the story (you haven’t read it). For the first chapter, I’m going to change it as I said before. But the other, I’m keeping as it is because that notes really have to be there
Well, it’s Dorotheya but you don’t see Dorotheya but DG and “Someone”, this someone will be shown as Dorotheya on the final part. But as I don’t like when it’s everything about the main characters, these others characters interactions may or not affect Dorotheya’s life
Ill take a review!
Story Name - Beyond Repair
Instagram - giana.epi
Author - Giana
Genre - Romance
Episodes - 3
Summary - After a tragic accident Lola leaves her hometown hoping to find herself again, but she finds someone else instead, Is Lola capable of love or if she broken beyond repair?
Style - Ink
Link- http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4518274726690816
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Yes please! Being a newbie to Episode writing, I would really appreciate some feedback to help me learn and improve my work as I go.
Thank you and happy reading!
TITLE: Whoopsie Daisy AUTHOR: Sunrise
GENRE: Little bit of everything but I put it under the Fantasy category. STORY DESCRIPTION: She lived a normal, peaceful life but thats all about to change. Will she survive all of the changes? A dramatic, romantic, exciting tale… with a twist on the supernatural.
COMPLETION STATUS: Published up to Episode 4 (more episodes are coming soon)
SOCIAL MEDIA ACCOUNTS:
Instagram: alleyesonsunrise
I’m rewriting a former written story of mine and published it as a new one now. Would love to hear your feedback.
Title: LOVE: Mission (im)possible?
Author: Nadi_Episode
Description: You’re experiencing a new country while you find yourself in the middle of a chaos of love. Is finding true love really a mission impossible?
The timed choices were nice although weren’t necessary for the situation
The option of denying Julian of doing the hair dye was a little pointless, considering it happened anyway.
In the mirror scene where Zyro is getting his hair dyed, his reflection is bigger than he is.
In Chapter 2 when Julian drops the gun on Agent Jay, the gun is way too big when it lands on the ground.
Honestly, I can’t fault the story of it much. It has a nice storyline (at least from what I read) good character development, and I feel like everything was explained.
Things I liked
First off, I get a great first impression with the limited customisation screen.
It’s a little bit sad that the zooms don’t work properly on my iPad as you mentioned.
Characters are super cute, especially Zyro. Really awesome name and hair colour.
OO I love love how it starts!
Great use of overlays.
Really nice switch of over the shoulder convos in chapter 1
Great zooms
The ending screen of Zyro is super cute lol
Nice chapter length, not too long, not too short.
Overall, really nice story, I’m really into this type of story genre, so it really hooked me. I could tell what the story would be about, which is really important to me. Nice character development, zooms, dialogue etc. I don’t think you need any major changes, just a few tiny directing changes.
So something that usually bothers a lot of people is not having full stops/periods at the end of some sentences. It doesn’t bother me that much but I know a lot of people hate when there isn’t proper grammar and punctuation.
I also noticed you made one of the characters say “u” instead of “you”. Try not to do this, it makes it seem like it’s a text message and not dialogue.
The directing is really basic, but it is your first story so I’ll let it slide.
Some sentences that characters say don’t have an animation to go with it so it doesn’t look like they’re speaking.
The first chapter was really short, it was literally 2 scenes. Usually I like when the first chapter of a story gives me a rough idea of what’s to come, but I can’t really say I knew what was going on.
In Chapter 3, when Mr Carter and Blaze are talking, it’s zoomed on Mr Carter the whole time and you can’t see Blaze. Not sure if this was a mistake or not?
Woah, chapter 3 was even shorter. I know you did apologise for a short chapter, but it was 2 very short scenes.
The other chapters have pretty much the same small issues
Things I liked
I like the look of the characters and their outfits
Like the option to change the outfit
Ok, in the second chapter I think I finally see the plotline and where this is going.
I really like the name “Blaze Norman”
The dialogue is nice and sounds professional.
Nice choices as well. They aren’t important choices, but still make the story interesting.
Nice cliffhanger in chapter 5
So in conclusion, you are a new writer, so I understand that you might not be able to do advanced directing yet, but I think if you take the time to learn advanced directing and zooms etc, your story will become a lot more interesting. Overall the story has a nice plot and even though it’s not usually the type of story I would read, I probably would continue on the condition that you improved the directing in the future. Keep up the good work! It’s great for your first story.
Story: Temperamental Author: Sam & Renae Genre: Romance/Drama Style: INK Episodes: 3 Description: Victoria Hartley will do whatever it takes to leave her past behind. What will she do when fate has other plans involving Jackson Kingsley. Instagram:@renae.sam.epy
Hi, thanks for this thread
Read as many chapters as you want Falling For Bad Plot : Two ex-best friends,one with anger problems and one with cyclothymia disorder.
Both are bad for Kate,but one is going to win her heart.
[LL,CC,Point System,Choice Matter,Minigames]
Episodes : 11
Status : On going
Gerne : Romance & Drama &
Style : Limelight
CC : Available
Also : In my story, I use New Backgrounds other from Episode’s Art Catalogue and Overlays .
My story contains, Minigames & Point System and your choices matter and affect your status with the characters!
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6387556438835200
My IG : @nellyy.epi
Hey! I would like a review please.
Here’s the info:
Title: Feminism
Author: Maria P. Whiberlli
Description: Five women whose rights have been taken away from them. Five pieces that will change the law. Men and Women will be equals once all pieces have been found.
Thank you so much for this thread. Please be as honest and blunt as you want and take your time!
Title: Your Woman
Author: wesley
Description: Her eyes are always in books or her studies; never caught by someone else. After being told to tutor Hazel, a stubborn hot-head, she finds something more intriguing.
Number of chapters: 4
Covers:
you had me relieved here, I was afraid it was too formal…
And that’s great, from what I read it’s really good. You should totally publish it soon!
Here’s my story !
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