There isn’t an end to the choice! If you just click enter after kiss_blow_happy_atcamera (which might need to be changed to @CHARACTER starts kiss_blow_happy_atcamera) and put a ‘}’ then it should be fine. This might happen more than once so look out for it.
Would you be willing to just read over my story real quick? It is only 1 episode long as of right now and that episode isn’t done. I can give you the link. It’s unpublished.
I think the plot is amazing and the personalities of the characters are shocking (in a good way - it’s unexpected).
However, I think you should slow the story line down a bit - I feel like it goes so fast. I know it’s hard to slow it down when you have so many good ideas but I feel like you’re jumping from one thing to another. The only other thing I had noticed was how the actions the characters had didn’t change much. Try making them react to something someone said.
Apart from this, I think it will get a lot of reads and fans!
I’d recommend that you add in things before the big event. Or something before they start the truth or dare. Maybe try to create a backstory and lengthen out everything.
Everytime someone says something, make the others do something.
“I dare you to…”
One looks shocked, one looks sheepish and the other looks proud?
Instead of them standing around waiting for their next line. This will also give you more lines so if you’re lazy like me then this would help immensely!
I’m not trying to be rude, just to help - so don’t take any of that in the wrong way!