Advice on my story

Hey, i was wondering if anyone could read the first 3 chapters of my story then give me any feedback?
i will do a read for read and i would deeply appreciate it.

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One party seemed to change everything for you. You went from single and lonely to coupled up and a socialite. But what happens when the cracks start to show in your innocence?
(the bio once i fully release the story will be more in depth)

AUTHOR Nataliexox

thank you x

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Just read your story! I’ll send my feedback some time tommorow.

thank youuu !

No problem!
Honestly, I really loved your story. I’ve only read chapter 1 and 2, but I’m loving it so far.

I would recommend adding a little more dialogue between the characters in episode 1. So your readers get to understand the main characters better! Since, you did say it was an episode to introduce the character’s, I think a little background info on them would be great.

Also, I did notice some of you I were “i”. Make sure your grammar is correct. This can help your story get more views.

With that being said, I really do love your story! And I’m excited to see your story grow! :heart:

thank you so much and i will change that!

No problem! :purple_heart:

I can’t wait to read your story, after you revamp it!

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