Ally's Help Thread


#1

Hello, my name is Ally. All of you have probably seen me here and there on these and the old forums. I’d like to offer the help beginners and old comers need.

I can help with all the basic stuff and some advanced stuff, like:
-Dialogue(grammar and punctuation)
-Gains
-Branching
-If (gain_name)
-Dressing Games
-Choices
-Text Effects
-Overlay Spotting
-Panning to Zones
-Cutting to Zones
-Zooms
-Advanced Spot Placing

If you just need some cool splashes, honest story reviews, or need answers to some simple Episode Questions, I’ll link my threads below.
Please describe your issue or paste the script here.

I hope I can help you!


#2

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
Hi! Welcome to my story Serenity....
| color:maroon , bold , underline |In this story, your choices will matter!
| color:maroon, bold |There are 5 endings that you can get!
Good luck I believe in you reader!
    NARRATOR
Please turn up your sounds!

INT. ACADEMIC HALL - DAY

Camera - Zone 1 2-Shot {

@cut to zone 1
@ALYSSA stands screen right AND ALYSSA faces left
@SERENITY stands upscreen left AND SERENITY faces right
@zoom on 310 360 to 130% in 0
SERENITY (talk_greet)
Hi Alyssa

    ALYSSA (talk_greet)
Sup Seren Ren Ren

    SERENITY (talk_headache)
I told you not to call me that!

    ALYSSA (talk_cover_mouth_awkward)
Oopsies!

    SERENITY (talk_giggle)
You're lucky I love you!

    ALYSSA (talk_condescending)
I know
    ALYSSA (talk_crossed_arms_loop)
What are you wearing?
    SERENITY (talk_gossip)
Clothes
    ALYSSA (talk_crossed_arms_loop)
Really
    SERENITY (talk_condescending)
I think I still work this outfit!
    ALYSSA (laugh_chuckle)
Whatever you say Seren

Camera - Full Shot {

@zoom reset
@ALYSSA stands screen right AND ALYSSA faces left
@SERENITY stands upscreen right AND SERENITY faces left
@LILITH enters from left to screen left AND LILITH faces right
LILITH (talk_angry_point)
UGH!
GET OUT OF MY WAY YOU DUMB BITCHES!
ALYSSA (talk)
Seren you should go to class before you’re late
I’ll deal with her
SERENITY

choice “Hell no! We stick together Alyssa” {
SERENITY (talk)
Hell no! We stick together Alyssa
ALYSSA (talk_disagree)
No, seriously go to class.
SERENITY (talk_crossed_arms)
Fine
@SERENITY exits right AND SERENITY faces right
LILITH (talk_angry_point)
Who the hell do you think you are! HOW DARE YOU IGNORE ME!
ALYSSA (talk_to_the_hand)
I’m a queen, bitch

@ALYSSA exits right AND ALYSSA faces right
LILITH (surprised)
(How dare they!)
gain chose_guilty1
}
“No, lets go we don’t need to get in trouble”{
SERENITY (talk)
No, lets go together. Please?
It’s not worth it Alyssa.
ALYSSA (talk)
But but
(I wanted to impress you)
SERENITY (talk)
We humbly apologize Lilith
Have an amazing day!
@SERENITY exits right AND SERENITY faces right
@ALYSSA exits right AND ALYSSA faces right
LILITH (think)
(Maybe I should have been nicer to them)
(I guess I’ll just swallow my pride and apologize later)
gain choose_innocent1
}
INT. CLASSROOM BLACKBOARD - DAY
@MRS BRIGGS stands screen left and MRS BRIGGS faces right
MRS BRIGGS (talk_tired)
Welcome back to school everyone
if (gain chose_guilty1){

@ALYSSA enters from right to screen right AND ALYSSA faces left
@SERENITY enters from right to upscreen right AND SERENITY faces left
MRS BRIGGS (talk_crossed_arms_squint)
You’re late, yet again Alyssa
ALYSSA (talk_crossed_arms_squint)
I was helping our new student find her way to your wonderful class Mrs.Briggs.
MRS BRIGGS
Anyways, why don’t you introduce yourself newbie.
SERENITY

choice “Hi I’m Serenity! I like videogames and the color pink” {
SERENITY (talk_happy)
Hi I’m Serenity! I like video games and the color pink.
gain choose_chill1

} “Hello, my name is Serenity. I look forward to having a great school year with all of you.”{
SERENITY (talk)
Hello, my name is Serenity. I look forward to having a great school year with you all
gain choose_formal1
}
MRS BRIGGS
Hopefully you will be a pleasure to have in class.
Don’t make a habit of being late to my class.

}
elif (choose_innocent1){

@ALYSSA enters from right to screen right AND ALYSSA faces left
@SERENITY enters from right to upscreen right AND SERENITY faces left
MRS BRIGGS (talk_crossed_arms_squint)
Right on time! That’s a first for you Alyssa.
ALYSSA (talk_crossed_arms_squint)
I know Mrs.Briggs! I just missed you so much!
MRS BRIGGS (disappointed)
Now after my reunion with my favorite student Alyssa
MRS BRIGGS (talk)
It is time to introduce our new student!
Please introduce yourself!
SERENITY

choice “Hi I’m Serenity! I like videogames and the color pink” {
SERENITY (talk_happy)
Hi I’m Serenity! I like video games and the color pink.
gain choose_chill1

} “Hello, my name is Serenity. I look forward to having a great school year with all of you.”{
SERENITY (talk)
Hello, my name is Serenity. I look forward to having a great school year with you all
gain choose_formal1

}
}

    MRS BRIGGS
Please take your seats!
Class will now begin.

This is my script. I’m trying to use the if/if else system however no matter what i pick i get the same outcome. I’ve watched the Joseph Evans tutorial yet this mistake keeps happening when I preview it!

BTW I’m writing in classic


#3

Quick Question:
When authors have the bubble that pops up at the bottom of the screen that contains a description. Then, it’ll go away.
How do you do that?


#4

@LaurieKrisette,

That’s a reader message. Just use:
@readerMessage Whatever you want to day.

Note: Reader messages now appear at the top of the screen. And they don’t appear in the writing portal.


#5

Okay, thanks. :smile:


#6

Please do not help others on my help thread. I don’t like when others take over threads. Not trying to be rude, but this annoys me… I suggest making your own thread, please.


#7

Sometimes, the web previewer does not process gains, ifs, etc. Try using the mobile previewer and see what happens!


#8

@readerMessage doesn’t work for me. Any idea why?


#9
    NARRATOR
Hmm... I can't see you. Are you invisible?
Oh! Right, you should design your character, I forgot!
Go ahead.

@YOU goes to character avatar

@YOU enters from left to screen left
@YOU faces right

    NARRATOR
Are you sure that's how you would like to look like?
You will only occasionally be able to change your hair and lips.

choice
"Yes" {

}

choice
"No" {

    NARRATOR
OK, but this will be the last time you can change your character.

@YOU goes to character avatar

}

    NARRATOR
See, that looks a lot better!

The issue is here:
choice (the second time I wrote that)

The error message is: “Choices must follow dialogue immediately, not a branch.”

I have tried a few things to try to fix it, but no success. I hope you can help me.

Also, the animations don’t work for me.


#11

Please do not advertise other threads on my own thread. This is very disrespectful and just because I am inactive on this thread does not mean I cannot answer this person’s questions.


#12

The readerMessage in the writer portal is not displayed as a character. In the web previwer, it also does not display reader messages. Double check the animation names and if they still do not work, let me know.


#13

I apologize. Post removed :v:t3:


#14

Hey! I’m just wondering if you knew if you can carry choices on into different episodes. I doubt it but just wondering.

Thank you!!


#15

What do you mean carry choices? Like remembering different choices from different episodes?


#16

Yes.


#17

Using gains. For example, if you use gain receiveddonut, you can use that gain in a different episode and it will be remembered. If you wanna test gains, you’ll have to go back to the episode you used it in and then the episode you wanna test. I hope this helps!


#18

Uhhhh… Mind explaining what the writer portal is? I’m quite new to this, so I don’t know a whole lot of things ^^"


#19

The writer portal is the website you are using to write Episode Stories on.


#20

Okay thanks so much!!!


#21

Oh, of course! Thank you a lot X3