@Epithet - Subverted
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That hand on your cover gives me some creepy vibes lol. I like your large cover.
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I like knowing that there’s going to be important choices in the very first episode.
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Oooh ash skin tones…
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I love how you’ve animated the fairies. Must be time consuming though to always spot them.
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I didn’t get cursed btw, in case you were wondering
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I liked how you slipped CC in so it felt sort of natural and not random like how I often feel it does in most episode stories.
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I’m getting very major Sleeping Beauty vibes from this so far haha.
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After the hug with Maebh, Elowen is still in the hug talk animation. Just add &ELOWEN is idle_shiftweight or something before Maebh’s line to fix that up.
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I’m liking that you’re giving most choices 3 options. And they don’t feel like pointless choices either.
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When Elowen walks in on Moiraine and Cyrus and they’re kissing, they’re lips are pretty far away from each other. Just try moving them closer together.
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Oh shit. Is Moiraine supposed to be with Milo? Did we just walk in on her cheating??? Omg
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There’s a few speech bubbles you might want to spot because they cover Moiraine’s face.
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Er, so what happened to Cyrus?
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I am liking that Milo has a signature way of talking and it’s not too hard for readers to understand what the words are that you’ve changed too.
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I’m not surprised Milo didn’t believe me but gosh, drama queen much? Hahaha
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So after she meets her mum, they’re talking in the hallway but they’re on a walking loop, yet the background isn’t moving. Looks a little weird.
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Haha, everyone thinks I’m out to steal their fiances and partners.
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Ooooh, what a cliff hanger. (Also, is Xavier a love interest?)
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I loved the scene with all the “commoners” waiting in the line to see king and queen. I bet it was a real bitch to code.
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What? There’s 6 endings??? Oh no, I better take this more seriously!
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I’m assuming the king’s brain washing people to keep them happy?
Ok, so I’ve reached the end of the story. I have to say I’m super impressed with the way this story has progressed. It’s evolved in to something so much more than what I thought it would when I started and your story. I really love how you do your choices, they feel important, they’re engaging and you also give a few more options that most people overlook. Great work 