Ok, I was actually wondering if the point system was involved. It was set up to feel as though it was anyway, so nice job.
Now seeing what you’re saying I’m going to guess you’ve planned this to be more like a long novel? It sounds like there’s still a lot more to the plot, that would have explained the things I didn’t know.
LOL your friends and family must be so different to me! I’d ask so many questions that a gang member would have shot me by episode 3… Maybe episode 4 at the latest!
Yes, I still have a lot of things in my brain that I haven’t even hinted on until now (as I did with some other things)
Well, it’s good everybody is different!
Hey! Idk if you’re still adding people to the waiting list, but I’d be thrilled if you reviewed my story <3
Title: Subverted
Author: Epithet
Genre: Fantasy
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5810209749336064
@MonicaCristina - Dear Lilly
So before I start, I just noticed that you requested this exactly a month ago, and said you had 4 episodes and now you have 7, so you must be really fast with updates!
NOOOOOOOOOO not an author’s note at the beginning!
I’m not too sure on this, but I believe a test won’t say someone has amnesia, it would just show head trauma and the doctors would diagnose her with amnesia after talking to her and asking questions. Not positive, but I am pretty sure scans and things won’t show amnesia, so you might want to change the wording.
I like that you have staff in the background of the hospital.
In the second scene Damien is in the wrong zone when he’s on the phone. Was that so we don’t see his face?
Love that when she finds out her age, she reacts because she’s almost 30. Lol
When Ryder enters, and Lilly wants him to be her fiance (which I am totally 100% on board with! This is going to be dramatic, I just know it), she says “PLEASE TELL HE HIS MY FIANCE” but I think you meant to say: PLEASE TELL ME HE’S MY FIANCE
What scandalous first choice you’ve given your readers hahaha… Although, why didn’t her sister stop them?
I like that you’ve used a filter in your flashback, but watch your BG characters. Some of them were scaled way off with their sizing.
Damien’s letter… Well, all I’ll say is if my boyfriend/fiance of three years couldn’t get past his insecurities to see me in hospital, it wouldn’t matter how cute the recreating the dates idea is, I’d be angry. So you can bet I’m on team Ryder! I’m actually now wondering if all these letters (which I’m guessing are pretty important because of the title) are going to lead Lilly straight into Ryder’s hands…
In the next flashback, young Lucy needs to be brought forward a layer
( I chose not to get back at Rose)… I hate when a choice gets rejected! But I like that you acknowledged it, so I’ll let it slide…
THEY CUT HER HAIR?? Not cool…
In the next flashback at the park, your BG characters need to be scaled smaller
Omg yes at everything that was the ending of episode 2. I love how you’ve been doing your flashes for the transitions of the flashbacks. And you’ve kept the same filter for consistency. Most of all I love that Lilly agrees with me. She is totally team Ryder and is low-key angry at Damien, so I am very happy.
After the next flashback/memory, when we come back to the present, Lilly is wearing different clothes
When Monica does the flirt_fingersnap animation to get that ending look, I see her hand when it’s zoomed in Lilly. Maybe face her the other way for the animation then turn her around again
Lilly switches outfits again at the beginning of episode 5. It wasn’t what I had her wearing…
So when they get to the restaurant and Lilly sees Adam, have her face rear like the others are. Otherwise it doesn’t actually look like she’s seen him.
Lol, I’m just imagining how long your script must be for the restaurant scene since you have Lily doing so many animations while the narration goes. It looks good.
I needed more time to read Damian’s second letter!
Oh, you’re narrating the note, nevermind…
Dr Hottie looks a lot like what Damien looks like from behind 
I wonder…
Wait! WTF pregnant?? Ooooh! You know I love that she’s 29 and pregnant. So much more realistic than other episode stories who would have made their MC a teen.
Even though I still despise author notes, I laughed at this one after you said that about it “becoming another pregnancy story”. It’s a shame you have to mention that, because if they app wasn’t flooded with teen pregnancy, you wouldn’t need to assure people that you’ve still got more coming.
Ooooh this thunderstorm looks hectic! Nice directing.
Wait, she lost the baby already?
I think you must just like that style of hair and jawline combined together because the doctor, Damian and Adam all sort of look similar.
Usually I know from the get-go who I’d chose for an MC for her LI but I’m actually struggling with this because now I like Adam too.
Adam’s sleeping with his glasses on?
Ok a really minor thing, but Lilly running on the beach whilst wearing high heals?? Hahahha, impossible!
Run away with Lilly? But why? What about her job? And check ups at the doctors about her amnesia?
I wanted to ask where you got your blanket overlay from? It looks so much like the one I have for one of my stories
Every time Lilly walks to the dresser, she’s walking back but facing forwards. Have her walk_rear
So I’ve read this over the course of two days and I’m pretty pleased with where I’m at now with Ryder. I do want to see where this goes because I thought the title sort of meant the letters would be continuous throughout the whole thing. But I trust you have a plan for this anyway.
Only note I would add as an overall thing is sometimes you had capital letters for words that didn’t need to have a capital letter as they were in the middle of a sentence. I only saw it maybe 4 or 5 times, so it was nothing major to worry about, just keep an eye out when editing.
Well you’d get shot too
Will do. (I’m always adding to the list, btw, just occasionally slow with the reading part lol)
At least I was brave 
Seriously, if they think I’m just going to go along with it, they got another thing coming-I will fight, and try to knock as much of them out as possible, using tactics…and if they get me, alas, I tried…
Ahaha 
That’s the spirit!
Hi!
First of all, thank you so much for the detailed review.
Regarding the mistakes you pointed out, I’ll fix that as soon as possible.
With the preview not working on the web portal, it’s harder! -.-
You’re welcome!
And gosh, I know the feeling. I depend on the web previewer so much and it has been really slowing me down lately
Hahahaha, I know some people like them so I’ve tried to not be as harsh about them lol. Most of yours were only doing the warnings anyway, though I did notice you went to the effort to chnge clothes each time, so wow! I can see why you might be tired of them.
Yes, I did. Problem with the way I do reviews is I sometimes look like an idiot for thinking one thing and then many dot points later I realise the truth.
Oooh, I totally get that since your characters are a lot older to what most other episode stories are
This has got me so intrigued, because I full on thought I knew where you were going and now I’m just like… Yeah, I have no clue. So many different directions you could go…
I just wanted to ask what you thought about the length of the episodes?
It was the perfect length for me. I think episode 1 felt the shortest, and I noticed a subtle increase in length as each episode went on. But it’s not like the first one was so short that it’s worth complaining about, so I stick by my original statement of it being the perfect length
Thank you so much!
You were so helpful!
If you’re ever in Portugal, we should go for coffee 
Aw, you’re so welcome. I’m glad I could assist.
Absolutely! 
I’ll start searching flights haha
@Mthoenen - The Final Girl
I like that you start off with some custom backgrounds and overlays, but the excess white on the car is a bit distracting.
I’d also recommend to spot direct your speechbubbles for that first scenes so we know where the voices are coming from. i.e the car.
I love how many subtle omen’s I’m picking up on. Like of course they won’t be using their phones and of course it’s in thee middle of nowhere. It’s set up just the way a true scary story would be.
I don’t really think it’s necessary to pan over every room. I’m sure if the room is important, it will be incorporated later in the story, so you don’t need to do it for every single bedroom at the beginning.
I think I saw a typo but I tapped too quickly to double check. “Better to lose it this weekend then never” Then should be than.
Aw that was a really short first episode! I haven’t learn enough about the characters or the dynamics of the friendships yet.
“If I end u dying out here…” Another omen perhaps? I’d put money on it that she is the first to be bopped off.
Just a little something extra to add… Have your characters face rear sometimes to look at the view and such. They don’t always need to face the screen, because it makes them look like they aren’t properly enjoying the scenery and nature.
And it just looks like half of them walked on air to get to the edge of the cliff. Try spotting them off screen and walking them into place instead of using the enters command. That way, you can stop them from looking like giants that are shrinking too quickly when they are walking to the spot.
Yes, I like that you swapped out for a different background to show how they were looking at the view! And now it also feels like we’re getting some more alone time with Grayson.
Careful with the layers. Jess and Kian both swapped their layers after they walked in so it looked kind of weird.
Episode 2 's length is getting there… But I’m still not sure that it was quite long enough.
Ok, so I obviously don’t trust this Shawn person.
When you have big groups of characters, it’s sometimes better to take advantage of zooms. If you zoom in on he characters that are talking, you don’t notice that the others are in the background just standing still.
I loved this interaction:
“What do you think about Shawn?”
“Kind of creepy”
LIKE YES!!! Quinn is smart!
There’s a few layering issues I’ve seen so far. Luckily they don’t affect the story too much, but it’s things like the end of someone’s elbow being behind someone else’s foot. Just make sure if they’re in the background, to have there layers small numbers, and if they’re up close to the screen use higher numbers for layers.
Riley’s explanation of why Jess wants Quinn to do it with Grayson is SO weird… If it’s true, Jess is crazy and I don’t trust her.
Don’t forget to remove the drink prop!
Nothings going to ever happen" should be nothing’s
Lol, what?! Jess and Grayson doing it on the edge of a cliff? Hahaha kinky…
When you do your recap for episode 5, Shawn and Quinn are already in their underwear…
holy crap I just realised how terrible it is. Quinn doesn’t even know Shawn. Smh!
Some of the blood overlays are kind of delayed when getting to their spot. Make sure all your script commands are like this:
&overlay GETOUT shift to spot XYZ
&overlay GETOUT scales to XYZ
That should avoid the split second delay.
Ok, so I am confused at how Quinn all of a sudden was at the asylum… I thought it was a dream tbh.
Also, all your characters need to change their outfits for the flashback to what they were wearing when they met Shawn. (Jess is in her underwear LOL)
Plea of insanity…? So that means he’s probably a serial killer who avoided jail time by claiming he was crazy… OMG Quinn lost her v-card to him HAHAHAHA
What? It was a dream? Oh… Maybe consider using a filter to make this clearer? Also Quinn is still wearing the clothes she wore in the dream.
WHAT?! It might not have been a dream? WTF are you doing to my head, girl? This is one massive mind game now.
And that’s where you leave your ending for chapter 5??? Mean!
Anyway, that was a pretty interesting start I think. Episode 1 was pretty short. I think the first 3 were, tbh and if you have time, maybe go back and add some extra scenes - just things that would help your readers get to know all the characters a little better. I think 4 and 5 were a good length though.
I didn’t pick up on too many choices now that I think about it, so maybe if you added in some choices to those first three episodes, it could help you add some length?
But I will say, you have drawn my interest enough that I will continue to read to find out whether this was a dream or not lol
Thank you I really appreciate it! I’ll definitely go back to the beginning chapters and fix everything!
Hey there! I’d love a review
Title: Echo Creek
Genre: Adventure
Author: Jade R.
Episodes: 4 (more to come)
Description: Being sent off to an odd town is a dream for you. But what happens when that dream quickly deteriorates into a nightmare? Lives are at stake here, specifically yours.
Instagram: @writingwithjade
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5187200149225472
Cover Thanks to @hexagonepi for this amazing cover!:
I’m not just gonna sit around and go with it-I will DEMAND for answers!