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Hello to all of the aspiring authors who this may concern! My name is Amealia and I know that when writing you tend to go through your story many times and once you are one hundred percent sure it is great you want to publish it. You go to publish and its great until someone points out a mistake or a way it could be improved. Your confidence leaves in three seconds flat. I understand this!!! I deal with this same issue myself. That is why I created this thread, so none of us need to go through that.
Please Note: These are my opinions and may vary from other reviews you may get! I will be honest on this thread. This is a review thread not a debugging thread.
I tend to focus on the plot more than anything. I will talk about all of the other aspects of your story in my review as well but I feel like the plot is the most important part.
Make sure to tell me you have read my review as these do take time and I don’t want to do them for no apparent reason and post your story once. This is not a spam thread!
Fill out this form while asking for a review:
Cover: (if you dont have one yet it is alright just say so)
Description: (as long or as short as need be)
What do you want me to pay attention to most?
How many episodes should I review? (I will only review the first three at maximum because this takes time and I am also setting time aside for my own story)
Any other things I should know: (Who made the art, English is not native language, etc)
In my review I will talk about the following things:
Title (does it relate to the story), Diversity (races, sexualities etc.) Relationships, Flow of the story, Realistic conversations, zooming, spot directing, animations, choices, plot (does it make sense and will it last), and originality
If you would like here is an example of a review I did for @Turtle_Cat on her story Save Me, Hero! .
Title: After only three episodes I am unaware of how the title relates to the story itself but as I have said I have only read three episodes and It may relate to something in the future if so it should not be a problem.
Diversity: Your story had people of mostly white decent while few people were not I would try to include more diverse characters but this does not change the meaning of the story so this is completely up to you I saw no relationships so I can m=not really say much about the character’s sexualities.
Flow: The story flowed relatively well but I feel like instead of timeskips throughout Hero’s day there should be something that leads her to what she may be doing next.
Realism: The conversations between characters were very realistic and were filled with emotion rather being very monotone. This was easily one of your best things.
Zooming: Your zooming was very well done but something that you should be aware of is the “No-Zone” you may or may not have ever heard of this. This zone is a small bit at the top and bottom of the screen that do not show up on devices like the i-Pad or any device with a different aspect ratio than an i-Phone 6. For more information on this “No-Zone” go to this link . . . https://www.episodeinteractive.com/write/guides?active_guide=commands
Spot directing: Your spot directing was great and I saw absolutely nothing wrong with it as it all made sense for this story and each scene within it
Animations: Your animations were put to use in a very good way. They were there when needed and cleared up any confusion concerning the character’s emotions
Choices: The choices were good but I would recommend that the outfit choices all have a name rather than “outfit 1” and “outfit 2”
Originality: This story is very original I have seen many stories about powers but I think this is a very good idea on how to make a story involving powers. I do not normally read stories about super powers but this one kept my attention throughout.
Plot: The plot is understandable and leaves no confusion to the reader but the holes within it leave for just the perfect amount of foreshadow and mystery to keep the reader interested in the story.
Other Notes: The story contained a few bugs here and there.
I would say your story is overall a very good one. I can proudly say I will be watching out for updates as I will definitely be reading!