Heyy so I feel like my first episode of my story (what i have so far) is kind boring and not very interesting. 
I was hoping maybe someone is able to read it and maybe help me change some things.
(I WILL GIVE FULL CREDIT)
Here is the script
(there is a few overlays that are used in it so if some scenes look a bit weird thats why 
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SCRIPT
EXT. NORTH PHILADELPHIA ALLEYWAY - NIGHT
@zoom on 421 361 to 251% in 0
music music_darkkeys
@AILAINI changes into STARTING OUTFIT
@JOSELYN changes into J STARTING OUTFIT
@add Gun Pistol Black to AILAINI
@AILAINI changes hair into Long Down Wavy Princess Braid
&AILAINI spot 1.000 104 112 in zone 2 AND AILAINI does it while idle_cup_worried_loop
&cut to zone 2
&AILAINI faces right
&AILAINI moves to layer 2
&JOSELYN spot 1.000 310 112 in zone 1 AND JOSELYN is idle_lay_exhausted_loop
@pause for 3
@zoom on 640 5 to 149% in 3
&AILAINI is idle_cup_sad_loop
@pause for 3
@zoom on 412 389 to 491% in 2
@overlay TEAR 1 create
@overlay TEAR 1 opacity 100% in 0
@overlay TEAR 1 scales to 0.046 0.046
@overlay TEAR 1 shifts to 93 350 in zone 2
@overlay TEAR 1 shifts to 93 333 in zone 2 in 2
&overlay TEAR 1 opacity 100% in 0 then overlay TEAR 1 opacity 0% in 2
@speechbubble is 212 98 to 100% with tail_top_left
AILAINI
(F*ck what has she got into.)
@SOPHIE walks to spot 1.050 104 112 in zone 2 in 4 AND SOPHIE does it while walk_neutral_loop
@add Baseball Bat Wood to SOPHIE
@SOPHIE is talk_bangdoor_intense
@AILAINI is faint
@pause for 0.5
@AILAINI is idle_lay_exhausted_loop
&SOPHIE is talk_evil_celebrate
@pause for 1
@SOPHIE is search_neutral
@pause for 2
@SOPHIE walks to spot 1.050 104 112 in zone 1 in 3 AND SOPHIE does it while run_super_speed_loop
music off
@transition fade out white in 3
EXT. DESERT VIEW - SUNRISE
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER create
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER opacity 0% in 0
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER shifts to 309 327 in zone 1
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER scales to 0.326 0.326
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER moves to LAYER 14
@pause for 1
@overlay 1 YEAR LATER opacity 100% in 4
@transition fade out black in 3
INT. HOSPITAL LIGHTS LOOP - NIGHT
music int_hospitalroom
@transition fade in black
@transition fade out black
@transition fade in black
@transition fade out black
@transition fade in black
@transition fade out black
@transition fade in black
@transition fade out black
NARRATOR (DOCTOR 1)
She’s waking up!
NARRATOR (DOCTOR 2)
I’ll go get a doctor Stewart.
@transition fade out black
INT. JUVIE HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY
@zoom on 585 425 to 210% in 0
@AILAINI changes into STARTING 1
&cut to zone 2
&AILAINI spot 0.622 14 472 in zone 2 AND AILAINI does it while idle_lay_groggy_eyesclosed_loop
&DR STEWART spot 0.622 265 312 in zone 2 AND DR STEWART does it while talk_handsopen_happy_loop
&DETECTIVE HILL spot 0.624 179 316 in zone 2 AND DETECTIVE HILL does it while talk_armscrossed_angry_loop
&DETECTIVE HILL faces right
@pause for 3
@AILAINI is idle_lay_groggy_neutral_loop
@AILAINI is idle_lay_awake_rubeyes_loop
@AILAINI spot 0.622 212 321 in zone 2
&AILAINI faces right
&AILAINI is idle_sit_legsup_wounded_sad_loop
@pause for 1
@AILAINI is idle_wounded_sad_loop
&DR STEWART is react_shocked_gasp
&DETECTIVE HILL is react_shocked_gasp
@DR STEWART is idle_armscrossed_neutral_loop
@DETECTIVE HILL is idle_armscrossed_shifteyes_loop
AILAINI (talk_unsure)
Where am I?
@AILAINI is idle_awkward_scratch_loop
DR STEWART (talk_handsopen_happy_loop)
You’re in the hospital.
DR STEWART (talk_explain_neutral)
My name is Doctor stewart. I have been assessing you while you have been in a | bold, animation:shuffle-sideways|coma.
AILAINI (talk_armscrossed_sad_loop)
A coma?
@AILAINI is idle_awkward_scratch_loop
DR STEWART (talk_armscrossed_neutral_loop)
Yes, now if it’s okay with you I would like to run some tests on you.
AILAINI (talk_afraid)
Tests?
DR STEWART (talk_reassure_neutral)
Don’t worry I promise it wont take long.
AILAINI (talk_unsure)
Uh, Ok I guess.
DR STEWART (talk_explain_neutral)
Heyy don’t be scared I promise you will be in safe hands.
DR STEWART (talk_neutral)
We just want to make sure you dont have any memory loss or some sort of medical condition.
AILAINI (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
Heh thanks.
@AILAINI is idle_awkward_uneasy_loop
DR STEWART
Okay I’m just going to set up is it ok if u lay on the bed for me?
@AILAINI is listen_nod_happy_loop
DR STEWART (talk_apathetic)
Detective with all due respect I’m going to have to ask you to leave.
&DETECTIVE HILL is idle_armscrossed_shifteyes_loop
@DETECTIVE HILL is eyeroll_sarcastic
&DETECTIVE HILL walks to spot 0.624 179 316 in zone 1 in 3
&DETECTIVE HILL faces left
AILAINI (talk_awkward_loop)
Uhh why is there a detective here?
DR STEWART
Hmm, do you not remember what happened?
AILAINI (talk_unsure)
Nope, why is it something bad?
DR STEWART (think_rubchin)
(hmm, could be memory loss)
DR STEWART (
Unfortunatly I dont know the full details of what happened but you did sustain a very bad head injury, which you already know lead to a coma.
AILAINI (talk_armscrossed_sad_loop)
Oh.
DR STEWART (talk_armsraised_neutral)
Well I suppose I better get going if you want these tests done today!
@AILAINI is laugh_chuckle
@DR STEWART is talk_greet_neutral
@DR STEWART walks to spot 0.624 179 316 in zone 1
@transition fade out black
@transition fade out white in 3
EXT. DESERT VIEW - SUNRISE
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER create
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER opacity 0% in 0
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER shifts to 253 213 in zone 1
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER scales to 0.776 0.776
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER moves to LAYER 14
@pause for 1
@overlay 45 MINUTES LATER opacity 100% in 4
INT. JUVIE HOSPITAL ROOM - DAY
@cut to zone 2
@zoom on 395 384 to 316% in 0
@AILAINI spot 0.622 75 386 in zone 2 AND AILAINI does it while idle_sit_anklescrossed_neutral_loop
&AILAINI faces right
@DR STEWART spot 0.622 128 345 in zone 2
(so sorry if i have tagged people 
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I am also unsure if i should have her friends or family in the room when she wakes instead of the doctor/s and detective.
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