Hey, I read the first chapter of your story and I will say you can make the detective and her family members stand there and you can show her bits of her past in chapters, like she is remembering things as you can show that she forgot her past and remembering it in bits. Also you increase the length of your first chapter. You can show that her family tries to keep her away from the thing that happened in her past and also they make sures that she never remembers it but she starts getting deeply involved with her past or i mean that her past is not leaving her and with this she meets her love of her life.
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