Anyone want to provide feedback on a few chapters of my story?

So I finished my first story a few days ago and I already know I need to fix some things, such as directing and plot lines. But it would be nice if anyone would give me their honest opinion on a few episodes of my story and possibly suggest some ideas to improve it : )

TITLE - Sweet Divine (COMPLETED)
GENRE - Romance
STYLE - Ink
SUMMARY - Getting away from a life Diana doesn’t want, she hopes to have a fresh start at college, until she meets the desired racer that shows her what few get to see.
FEATURES - choices that impact dialogue here and there
LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4798287757049856

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