Hello, I’ve just finished your story and I must say I absolutely loved it!!!
It was so different from the usual stories you can find on the app and I just couldn’t put my phone down.
I read the second part of the Wanderer but I will definitely read the first part, and most likely other stories you’ve written.
I don’t have any complaints regarding grammar or directing. Directing was basic, no overlays or anything but it was done right and that’s what is important. In my opinion having all the fancy directing means nothing if the plot is shit.
I also have no complaints regarding the plot as well. Maybe only thing I found odd was that when Corrine is a female she has quite pale skin, but when we see Corey he has peach skin I believe?
That’s really the only thing that puzzled me, you seriously did a great job! I’m really surprised it was so little reades because it is a gem.
Also I noticed that you had asked me why my story is called Under Construction, I haven’t fully gotten to that part in the story because I’m taking my sweet ass time with it.