Anyone willing to tell me what to critique on my story?

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 4:44am

Hey there!
Below is the link to my story, would someone mind reading the first and second episode, and tell me things to work on/change, or if you liked it even.
I really appreciate this and all criticism will be taken maturely so don’t feel bad if you have negative criticism!
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6155039112626176

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 4:49am

I wish I could but I have no clue how to but I bet it’s awesome honestly have a good night or day

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 4:50am

does the link not work?
thank you for your kindess!

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 4:54am

I don’t know I am on my Mac book but I can see if you like and it’s no biggie girl and it worked yay and its so far really good I love how you did the blackout background

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 4:54am

aww you are so nice! thank you so much!
I can’t ever get it to work on my mac either haha

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 4:58am

and honestly I mean i am still playing it and not gonna lie everything looks good I love the" mommy I think I got in connect with et “yes haha” I told him to return home for the second movie" I am dieing I love your humor

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 4:58am

aww you are so sweet!
Thank you so much!!!

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 5:00am

again no biggie can’t wait for more episode this is gonna Abe my favorite no joke I love ET and the humor is just like amazing like yeass girl honestly. and girl stoopppppp haha

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 5:01am

haha thank you!

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 5:03am

no biggie if you any other question or whatever feel free to pm anytime not free 24 7 but I am always up for new friendships and such.

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 5:04am

same here! You seem like such a nice and genuine person!

kiera2728 · June 10, 2020, 5:05am

thank you haha and you seem like a really cool person honestly

Blaire.epi · June 10, 2020, 9:10am

I can help you with critique if you want

Someone2 · June 10, 2020, 9:14am

I would help, but I’m in a chromebook, so I can’t access it. Sorry

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 2:38pm

That would be amazing! The link is up top
Would you mind reading the first chapter and then letting me know what you like, what should change, etc.

luna_schwarz · June 10, 2020, 2:39pm

I’d love to help you!

Celestial_Night · June 10, 2020, 2:41pm

Thank you so much!
Would you mind reading through the link I sent and telling me what to change and what you liked so that I know what people like in future episodes

isa_episode_1 · June 10, 2020, 8:11pm

Hey, I just read the first chapter, and I wanted to tell you that it’s really good.

Blaire.epi · June 10, 2020, 10:17pm

Omg its so good I literally can’t find anything wrong with it? I like shorter chapters so the length was fine to me

Celestial_Night · June 11, 2020, 1:39am

Aww you are so nice! thank you so much!