Creativity - 9/10
This story is not what u usually see on the app, I love the concept of a widow choosing between the living n the deceased. I’m rating this w 9 bc generally, I think the whole idea is rlly creative. I love the toxic colors of Ryder since he’s being possessive of his wife even when he cannot b w her. Him hurting Alex is intriguing in a way bc he’s helping mc n making her happy but yet Ryder still wants her to b by herself.
Character development - 7.5/1
I personally think, there’s probably a lot more developments to the characters in later episodes so I’m judging off the 3 chaps I read. It was v good! Ryder is a rather developed character, his personality change when he died is interesting bc he seemed chilled out when he was alive but after death he’s all defensive n protective of mc. Alex is sweet n obviously pitiful towards mc which I think was surprised that Ryder acted negatively towards bc he’s looking after his son in a way he cannot, I like that plot line n character change. I would like to know more abt mc, tho. I imagine we will learn more abt her character from flash backs in later chapters. She says in narration that she used to b a party girl before Ryder died but also that Ryder set her free n loosened her up… so I’m curious, did Ryder turn her to a party girl then w his death she changed again? I’d like to know more abt Kurt too. He did pay a smaller role tho but I’d defo b interested in seeing traits from his father shining thru then being silenced by Alex. It’d certainly b interesting to see how much like Ryder he is from his communication w the ghost (if he’s had any) n any influence he may have from his father. Ur character development is good! (Again development takes time n I’ve only read 3 chaps so I can’t go into much detail)!
Directing - 9.5/10
Directing was v well done! u had the ghost faded out all the time when it was possible, the zooms were good, transitions were smooth, spot directing was always used n characters mostly had an animation when they were speaking! (I noticed once or twice someone was supposed to b speaking but wasn’t in a talking animation, u might wanna check for that in future, I can provide a ss of this, if needed)!
Grammar - 8.5
v Good, u correctly used commas, parentheses, question marks, it was all done well. In future, I recommend censoring things like ‘pissed’ or ‘prick’ bc I believe those words need to b censored, but in general most was censored.
awesome! This was v well done all round, I loved the plot, fr. It was dark but also rather beautiful, the beginning where mc had to pick between her 1st choice, who was dead, n her 2nd choice, who was living was v good as a hook for the reader! The way Ryder chose death bc life became painful to him was a v interesting concept, I found that interesting it reminded me of the deathly hallows story concept generally, this was rlly good n I found myself wanting to continue bc u hooked me (:
Summary: well, Medusa, u made my job easy, ur story was well written, the plot was well carried out n you revealed everything at a good pace, meaning u added suspense + tension as well as giving us a good understanding of what’s going on! ur chapters were a substantial length n it was an enjoyable story to read! The music n sound was also appropriate for the events in the scenes. Well done! (I apologise if I’m a lil bias I’m not a v dark person so my preference is light hearted story but obviously I’m not gonna lower ur score bc of that ) I also love the eye catching cover + general art used throughout
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