Hey dear!
Just finished going through the first two chapters 
Ok, you’ve got a truly interesting story in your hands 
Nice directing! (even if some script templates were made by others > smart move )
Even though I noticed some things that I would give some advices about…
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Introduction: I think that the little intro you made when trying to make the reader aware of the sensitive topics you talked about in your story is not needed. With this I mean you should erase that part and just go on with the Luxe intro splashes and then, since they already state that your story will talk about strong and mature themes. Then you could add with a narrator speech bubble that your story treats those specific themes and ask id the reader is willing to keep reading knowing the topics you’ll be treating
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Yellow Maybe I’m the only one, but I really hate yellow coloured words in a speech bubble, I’ve a super hard time reading them and I hate to squeeze my eyes and move my phone in different positions in order to see what it’s written. So I suggest you choosing another color. Obviously it’s only up to you, but speaking for me, I’d appreciate it
Apart from this I don’t really have much to say, it seems like a great story so kudos to you! Can’t wait to know what is going on there… 
Good job and keep up with the great work, I’ve really enjoyed reading it, and I think I’m gonna save it, so I can keep reading it 