I like the intro.
Remember to use proper punctuation. You have places where periods are not in place at the ends of sentences.
At the part where Ellen says: “I just CAN’T live without him” I would suggest italicizing and bolding the word ‘can’t.’ I think it will bring more dramatic meaning to the word.
“I can’t loose him…Not now and not like that” (It should be lose and there should be a period at the end).
“I bet you are wondering what happened to me and how I could get to such situation” (It should be: “I bet you are wondering what happened to me and how I could get into such a situation.”)
“I’m fine honey” (Remember to put a comma before ‘honey’ as Marthe is directly addressing Ellen when she says it. I would also recommend capitalizing the word as well.)
“No, no! I’ll be okay. I’ll read book maybe. Don’t worry about me, angel.” (Should be: No, no! I’ll be okay. I’ll read a book, maybe. Don’t worry about me, Angel.”)
“And it hurts like a hell to see her suffer” (And it hurts like hell to see her suffer.)
The part about her grandma and grandpa being soulmates is sweet and really sets the romance aspects of the story up.
“Or if you heard then you definitely can’t imagine where the hll is it” (“Or if you heard then you definitely can’t imagine where the hll it is.”)
You use the word: ok. While there’s really nothing wrong with this, I would consider using ‘okay’ as I think it sounds a bit better in this type of writing.
You also use the word: wanna. While this is alright if it’s for the vernacular of being a teenager if you want to be more: “formal” I’d suggest using: want to.
Make sure your speech bubbles are pointing towards the person talking.
When Ellen starts talking to the audience, I found it a bit weird. I think it would be better to maybe have what she says as just simple narration.
“Now I would like to ask to get up on stage the best student and your Class President Ellen Clark” (Now, I would like to ask our best student and your Class President: Ellen Clark, to come up on stage.”
Flashbak is spelled: flashback
“You’re perfect daughter” (You’re the perfect daughter.)
“Ellen, Leila’s getting married on the next week. And we’re decorating wedding venue for her.” (Ellen, Leila’s getting married next week, and we’re decorating the wedding venue for her.)
“Sweetheart, can you please show to Miss Zaden samples of bouquets?” ( Sweetheart, can you please show Miss Zadeh bouquet samples?)
“She must be that important client of my Mom” (She must be that important client of my Mom’s.)
“Which one you like the most?” (Which one do you like the most?)
“I’ve chosen sample. I’m looking forward to see how you’ll decorate venue” (I’ve chosen the sample. I’m looking forward to see how you’ll decorate the venue.)
“My poor mom was abandoned in unknown country with a small baby.” (My poor mom was abandoned in an unknown country with a small toddler.)
Age 3 is more “toddler” age than “baby” age.
“That daughter of your’s so stubborn.” (That daughter of yours is so stubborn.)
“You coming to club, bro?” (You coming to the club, bro?)
“But I don’t wanna do anything such intimate with someone I don’t have any feelings” (But I don’t want to do anything so intimate with someone I don’t have any feelings for.)
“I’ll never fell in love” (I’ll never fall in love.”)
I love the friendship between Ellen, Mia, and Natalie.
Ellen having the guy read the book for a date is pretty funny.
This first episode feels a bit long for my liking. While episode length is ultimately a personal choice there are places where it seems to drag a bit. I would suggest maybe cutting some narration (especially in the beginning when Ellen is doing more telling than showing).
Ellen’s obsession with perfection is interesting.
I would consider either using grammarly or getting a proofreader to go over your episodes. There was a grammatical error in nearly every speech bubble.
I think, overall, you have a good start to a story, though. I would just work on your grammar and spelling and remember to show not tell.