I know I was supposed to message you for the feedback but I didn’t know if you were talking about the message in forums or fanmail.
I’ll just say it here if you don’t mind.
Here’s my feedback…
I read that story a few days ago and I absolutely loved it! I was looking for stories where you can play as a male and I found this. I wondered why it only had seventeen reads. The plot is amazing and I felt heartbroken when I reached the end of the fifth chapter.
I fell in love with the way you wrote and portrayed your characters. I am torn between Lara and Celeste (I love them both, sorry Hannah , still luv u tho).
Here’s some criticism though:
-it said that Celeste was smart and responsible. I don’t think it really fit her when (SPOILER ALERT, DON’T READ IF YOU DIDN’T READ IT YET) she was doing it with her teacher. I’m pretty much Celeste in real life and I had a tiny crush on my teacher. But a relationship? NOPE. I think Celeste would be smart enough to not do those things with her teacher.
-grammar and punctuation; I know you have a beta reader which is good but I still saw a few errors in your grammar and punctuation.
Erm… that’s it, actually. The rest are good! This is one of my favorite stories out of the fifty+ stories I’ve read so far.
dis story should be featured lol