Brutally Honest Story Reviews - Post Your Story Here [TEMPORARILY CLOSED UNTIL I FINISH CURRENT REQUESTS]


#1

I have been using episode for roughly 1 year now. I have read everything from action, to drama to romance, to fantasy, etc. I have read featured stories, popular stories, and stories with less than 100 reads. I have also helped a few authors with coding their stories. I am absolutely obsessed with Episode and I think it’s a wonderful and unique platform of entertainment.

I noticed it’s very hard to get attention if you’re a new author. I think a lot of newer authors could benefit from some constructive criticism and some tips and pointers. From what I’ve observed, if a story really is THAT amazing, it will EVENTUALLY get noticed. But, it has to be spectacular. And I want to help people achieve that in any small way I can by giving them some advice in my reviews.

If you post your story here, please know that I will not be sugarcoating how great your story is. Unless your story actually IS amazing, I won’t blow hot air and say it is. I believe that most stories have the potential to be amazing though. And that a lot of newer authors deserve more reads and more notice.

So, on to the important things: I have a lot of passes, hundreds actually. So I will read 3 chapters of your story if you post your story here. And I will give you a rating based on the following criteria:

- Storyline/Plot: How engaging is your storyline? Is the plot good? Does it have potential to enthrall and engross readers?

- Grammar/Syntax: How good is your grammar? I understand English is not the first language of many Episode readers, but since the stories are in English, your grammar and syntax must be excellent in order to keep people reading.

- Directing/Spot Directing/Zooms/Layering: How good is your directing? Do you use advanced spot directing, and if so, how well do you use it? Is it executed properly? Are the characters at the correct spots and are they layered properly? This is a make or break thing when it comes to stories. People will stop reading if your directing isn’t good.

- Story Title/Cover/Description: This is EXTREMELY important. I will be judging you on this, because every other reader will be judging you on this. Everyone judges a book (or story) by its cover. It may seem unfair, but it’s the truth. Is your story title engaging? Is your cover attention-grabbing? Does your description have perfect grammar and does it entice the reader to click your story?

- Chapter Length: Are you chapters the appropriate length? (Roughly 10-20 minutes) Do your chapters end in the correct place, story-wise? Does it make the reader want more? Are readers wasting a pass on your 5 minute chapter? These are all important questions! You have to give the reader a substantial amount of story in each chapter. They should feel satisfied after every chapter, and they should want to read more.

Character Appearance: Do you offer CC? If you don’t, you’d better have a good reason why! It’s harder to get reads if you don’t offer customization, and there should be a VERY specific reason as to why customization is not an option. How good is your CC template? Do you offer ALL the features? I will be judging you on this.

Character Quality: How interesting are your characters? Over the course of the story, is there character development or do your characters act the same way all the time? Is your MC likable, relatable or at least interesting? Is your love interest a likable person as well? If there is no love story, then I will focus on platonic/family relationships. How do you develop these relationships with your writing?

Choices: Do you offer choices throughout your story? Do the choices impact the story? I understand that they might not within the first three episodes. But choices make a story SO much more interesting and they make readers feel like their opinion actually matters.

Music: Do you use music in your story? Even if you prefer stories with no sound, you should use music for those readers who like their stories with sound. If you don’t use music, your story will be less likely to succeed. How well do you use music - do your scenes fit the sounds that you use?

Speech Bubbles:

  • Do the speech bubbles cover the characters’ faces? Do they indicate that the correct person is speaking? Are they the correct size and in the right spot?

Additional things I will judge that will not affect your story score:

FANMAIL: Are you responsive and courteous to your fans? Remember that without them your story wouldn’t have any exposure. I don’t like reading stories written by bratty authors. This won’t affect your story score, but it will affect people’s perception of you

RULES

1.) Do NOT spam this thread. ONE post is sufficient for me to read your story. If you post more than once or get pushy, I will ignore you and move on to the next person. Please be patient.

2.) Please try to be courteous and don’t be rude to me or anyone else participating.

3.) Again, be patient. It may take me a few days to get to your review.

4.) Understand that my review is NOT personal. I am simply trying to help you improve your story.

5.) If you improve your story and then want me to re-review it, please make a note of your improvements before posting a second time.

Thanks, and I hope to read many great stories soon!


#2

Hey, @AvidReader! Thank you for creating this thread! I’d love a detailed review on my story. Here are the details:

Title: Fantastical: Silhouettes
Author: aprilish
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Ink
Blurb: Arion’s ready to risk it all to make her dreams come true. Leslie sees him every day, yet fails to recognize who he is. Watch them fall in love…without ever meeting each other.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6116658762874880
Cover:


My Instagram: @aprilish.episode

Thank you so much! Looking forward to hearing your feedback! :two_hearts:


#3

I would really like to know what I can do to make this story more attractive to readers or what I can do to make it better! Thank you @AvidReader
Title: Dark Desires
Author: ashleyabrucker
Genre: Drama|Romance
Episodes: 5 (Episode 6 coming soon)
Five years after you get your life back together after your ex just up and left you, he comes back turning your life upside-down again
WARNING! Strong language and adult themes
Extra: advanced placements, zooms, name and customize characters :slight_smile:
fanmail: open- I do enjoy getting those!
(cover still under review)
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#4

I would be very grateful for an honest review :slight_smile:
Titel: Wherever I go
Author: Alisha Sophie
Chapters: 9 (Ongoing)
Genre: Drama
Description: Mia and her twin brother Cody lost everything. They try to get their lives back on track, but it ens in a lot of heartache and drama. Will everything be all right in the end?
Instagram: episode.alishasophie
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4613203588415488

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#5

REVIEW AFTER READING 3 CHAPTERS:

Storyline/Plot:

  • Your story is sweet, funny, interesting, and has a nice vibe.
  • As of Chapter 2, I am understanding the plot a lot better and where you’re going with this. I am interested to keep reading.
  • As of Chapter 3, I am beginning to understand the very first scene, which foreshadows where the story is going to end up at some point. Overall, you’ve done a great job with the storyline. (9/10)

Grammar/Syntax

  • Perfect grammar and syntax. Excellent dialogue. (10/10)

Directing/Spot Directing/Zooms/Layering:

  • Directing is very well done, I have nothing to complain about here at all. (10/10)

Story Title/Cover/Description

  • The title description is intriguing and makes me want to know more.
  • The cover is good, very good font, the photo could be a little more exciting but it’s good.
  • Story title is really good. (8/10)

Chapter Length

  • Chapter length is good and you end your chapters in a place that makes me want to read more. I definitely don’t feel like I’m wasting a pass by reading your episodes! I feel satisfied after each chapter. (10/10)

Character Appearance:

  • CC is offered but not all skin tones, eye shapes, eye colors, and noses are offered in the templates you’ve chosen. (5/10)

Character Quality:

  • Leslie is a likable character and both Flynn and Kurt are cute! I’m curious to see where things go with both of them. I like that she’s sweet and wholesome - my kind of MC lol… Eating cupcakes and talking about music sounds like an awesome date to me as well. Cleon is funny and I really like how you’re writing the characters so far. (10/10)

Choices:

  • You offer a lot of choices, from clothing to behavior, which is nice! I don’t know whether or not choices affect the story yet, but there are plenty, so awesome job :slight_smile: (10/10)

Music:

  • Music and sound is scene-appropriate and very well done. (10/10)

Willingness to read more:

  • I want to read more of your story. (10/10)

  • Overall Score:

92/100 with an A+ fanmail score! Awesome job!

NOTES:
This is a very solid, well-written story with excellent directing, dialogue and grammar. The chapter length is appropriate, the music/sound is on point and the storyline is compelling. You’ve done a wonderful job so far. Please continue to write as you are doing now. Once you have about 15-20 chapters, I think your story will pick up in reads. Your splashes are also good. You respond really kindly to your fans, which earns you major bonus points with me! :slight_smile: Consider changing your CC template to include all features - that is one thing you can really improve. Both the male and female CC templates are missing a lot of features. Try looking up Dara Amarie’s templates - they’re thorough and contain all features. AWESOME JOB though, seriously. I read a lot of stories, and yours is truly truly a good one. :slight_smile:
I’m a fan!


#6

Kindly read my story :slight_smile: it’s my very first story

Title : Paradise
Author : Maggy
Genre : Fantasy
Style : Limelight
Number of episodes : 9 (more episodes coming soon)
Instagram : maggy.episode
Description A young adult called Fidelia is about to become a Goddess, she has to follow the prophecy. Fidelia is strong and independent, fun, and a crazy party girl. Will she accept her faith?
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4807228412788736

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#7

hey, thanks for this thread :smile:

Title: You, Me And The Beat
Author: Anna
Episodes: 3/ongoing
Genre: Drama/Mystery
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#8

Heyy, @AvidReader
Thank you for creating this thread
I’m a new writter and I love to write for episode but I’ve tried to participate in a contest and didn’t have luck
So I will just continue with the story but if I don’t have readers I barely have hopes to continue
But again thanks for this thread it means so much for some authors

Title: My unreal world
Author: t.ss.y
Style: INK
Genre: Fantasy (also drama,romance…etc)
Lenght: Currently 7 episodes out
Description: You believe that your destiny is already decided by the fault of your parents’ mistake. But will you suffer more for your decisions? {ALWAYS FIGHT}
“CC”

Covers:

Instagram: @episode.tssy
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4522668114444288


#10

Hey thanks for lending us some of ur time and creating such topic :heart:

Here is my first story
Title: Stuck With You
Author: Tanzanite
Genre: Action
Bio: On her journey to recover, the last thing Linda expected is to run into her charming ex once again. Along with her hot rebound, she discovers her ex’s dirty secrets
State: Ongoing

The other one is quite lighter romcom school drama thing

Title: Manipulation
Author: Tanzanite
Genre: Drama
Bio: Your continuous misfortune turns to be a planned experiment that will switch you from transparent to the school’s top gossip
State: Ongoing

Check anyone of them if you have time and reach me easier on my ig account @tanzanite.episode

Also I am quite sure you will trip on some grammatical mistakes since english is not my first language


#11

Hi :blush: I would like to know what can I improve in my story
Title: Tears Between Smiles
Author: TessS
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Number of episodes: 4
Description: Fall in love, not in line. An unexpected friendship brings her to a punk lifestyle, new people, new experiences and love. But it’s not all fun and smiles.
Additional information: I don’t offer full CC because I don’t want to readers to identify with the MC, she will go through hard times and it may make them feel uncomfortable. Also, I will have some special art scenes later in the story.
Instagram: @tesssepisode
Link:


Thank you so much :black_heart:


#12

REVIEW AFTER READING 3 CHAPTERS:

Storyline/Plot:

  • The storyline and plot are executed well. Your narration at the beginning of the first chapter is really good and lends a solid foundation to your story.
  • Your introduction of all the characters is good… I know exactly who the mom, dad, brother, sister and love interests are and I’m interested in learning more about them.
  • I immediately wanted to know why the ex left the MC, you’ve created a good interest in that plot line.
  • The tension between MC, bf and ex is really good, especially at the end of Chapter 3.
    Great job! (10/10)

Grammar/Syntax

  • Grammar is very good with a few very minor errors." Bad" language does not bother me at all. (9/10)

Directing/Spot Directing/Zooms/Layering:

  • Directing, spot directing and layering are all really good. One thing to improve is when the characters are sitting down, say at a restaurant or in a movie theater, they should be sitting down lower - the way it is right now looks a bit like standing. But otherwise, your directing is perfect and I can tell you put a lot of effort into it.
  • When a character walks from zone 1 to zone 3, you can pan directly to zone 3 and make the character walk directly to that zone. You don’t have to stop at zone 2 first. This will make your directing a bit smoother. (8/10)

Story Title/Cover/Description

  • Story title and description are great, the cover needs more work. I personally would not mind that cover since the story description makes me want to read more, but other readers may be put off by the cover since it has no characters on it. (6/10)

Chapter Length:

  • Chapter length is good, and I was satisfied with where each episode ended. Great job! (10/10)

Character Appearance:

  • CC is offered but not all skin tones, eye shapes, eye colors, and noses are offered in the templates you’ve chosen.
  • There are too many CCs at the beginning of the first chapter. This can be a deterrent to some people - they may click out of your story because of this. I would suggest picking a fixed look/name for the family members and changing their skin tone based on the MC’s skin tone. This is just my personal suggestion to you. (5/10)

Character Quality:

  • MC is likable and relatable. I am interested to know more about what the deal is with the ex-fiance, even though he sort of gave an explanation. You’ve built up a good interest in him. I think you have done a good job with the foundation of the characters and their relationships.
  • The relationship dynamics between the family members and the MC are good. It’s nice to see that she has supportive parents!
  • Overall, I am curious to see how all relationships in this story develop and progress. I like your characters and want to know more about them. (10/10)

Choices:

  • Good choices, and I can see that choices impact the story. That is awesome.
  • Dressing games have a lot of options and you use dustoff_loop which is the best and most efficient way to do dressing games in my opinion.
  • Allow readers to look at an outfit for a few seconds before asking if this is the outfit they want. When I was looking through the outfits, I barely was able to see which outfit I was wearing before the speech bubbles covered it up. (9/10)

Music:

  • You have no sound in your story, which might deter some people from reading it. You should add sound and music as soon as you can. (0/10 but I will also score you without this score being a factor).

Speech Bubbles

  • Speech Bubbles are perfect. (10/10)

Willingness to read more:

  • Bottom line, I want to read more! :slight_smile: (10/10)

Overall Score:

77/100 OR 77/90 (without the sound/music category) and an A+ fanmail score!

NOTES: You’re doing an awesome job, so keep going. The story moves at a good pace and the drama between the three main characters is compelling. The best friend’s overzealousness is funny, too. She is a very well-developed character. Add sound to attract more readers to your story. Consider changing your CC template to include all features - that is one thing you can really improve. Both the male and female CC templates are missing a lot of features. Try looking up Dara Amarie’s templates - they’re thorough and contain all features. I can really tell how much work you’ve put into this story, and believe me, it shows. Just fix a few things and keep adding new chapters. Once you’ve got a good 20 or so chapters and a new cover, I think you can attract a lot more readers :slight_smile: Great job!


#13

Ah you have a new cover that is currently in review. I will add 2 points to your cover/title/description score, bringing your score up to 79! The red font is a bit difficult to read, but this cover is a huge improvement and I like seeing the characters on it!


#14

Hi! This makes me kinda nervous, but I want a brutally honest review!! lol.
Thank you so much :slight_smile:

Here is my story:

Title: Dark Side Daddy
Type: Ink
Genre: Romance
Chapters: 9 (ongoing)
Author: Zee
Description: You: beautiful, deceived, & underestimated.
Him: sexy & mysterious, with a soul-piercing gaze. A chance encounter leads him to you. What happens next is up to you! [CC/choices]
Instagram: @zeesmusic

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#15

Send me a fanmail once you read my story :grin::iphone:.

Title of the story : Trail Of Tears
Name of the author : Cindy
Story genre : Drama/Romance
Description : A girl who goes through a lot in her life. Some days are good and some days are bad she wants to just be a normal girl that does not have to run away from her problems. CC
Link : http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5548954080247808
Style : Ink
Episodes : 16

Can you please PM me the review.


#16

Hey. Thank you for creating this thread. I would love for you to review my story.:slight_smile:
Here’s the details to my story in case you want to check it out.
Author: S_Unique
Title: The Four Horsemen
Genre: Fantasy
Style: Ink
Description: 4 Sins. 4 Angels fell. 4 Horsemen rose. A curse was casted. And the battle of good vs evil is about to begin. CC/ Choices matter
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5482099054608384


#17

Title of the story : The Race Of Life
Name of the author : liora
Story genre : Drama
Description : Life is normal if you can call it an incomplete family but how one act can make life a race, the question is if Sofi can take the wheel in her hands and control it ?
Link :http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6192402006409216
Style : Ink
Episodes : 5
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Tell me what you think
#18

Hello @AvidReader I would love to receive a review please. :grin:

This is my story.

Story title: Rewinded life.

Author name: Lia Lopez.

My instagram: lia_lopez_episode

Description:
What would you do if a galactic being gives you the power to go back and change situations that escapes from your hands?

Genre: Comedy, romance, life.

Episodes: 5 (Working on chapter 6.)(Ongoing.)

Link:

Cover: Pending review.


#19

I would love for you to do a review! I think that’s the only way people can get better by putting out there and getting reviews on it. Thank you!! :grin::clap:t3:

Author: Samanntha
Title: Wrestling In Love
Genre: Romance
Style: Ink
Chapters: 3
Brief Description: My story is about a girl and how the sport of wrestling is her life. Apart from that she is “head over heels with a boy” and that boys best friend is in love her. Big love triangle and as well as drama with a mean girl.

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#20

Thank you so much for your review @AvidReader. I will take yor advice :smile:


#21

This has got to be the most helpful and amazing review I’ve ever gotten. I’m seriously out of words. Thank you so, so, SO much! :’)))) You’ve really got me motivated to keep on writing, and I can’t tell you just how much this means to me. I’ll definitely take your advice and change the CC templates. Also, my story is going to end at about twelve episodes, but I do hope it gets some more reads. xD

Thanks a TON once again! :sob::sob::heart:

Have a wonderful day! :purple_heart: