Hello!! I want to know if you would be interested in reading my story “Twinning” the description is “ New town and a fresh start! What a dream come true for these twins, WHO ARE TWO DIFFERENT PEOPLE. It’s not like anything can go wrong…right?” the genre is Mystery! I’m a new author and it would help me out to know what I need to improve on!
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Hey, so I’ve just finished chapter 1. I noticed that none of the sentences have punctuation, as well as a few grammar mistakes. Aside from that, I’m a little confused as to what is going on. I don’t mean this to be harmful, but it doesn’t sound like there is any specific direction in the story. What I mean is, it’s not very clear as to what your story is centered on. I understand that the story focuses on twin sisters, but aside from that, I’m not sure. I know it’s sometimes hard to set the stage for your story in just the first chapter, but I feel like that could be improved upon. Additionally, I’m curious about the teacher scene…? The fact that the teacher tricked the other teacher into kissing her was a bit out of line imo. Aside from those things, your directing was great!. I really enjoyed to see the use of spot directing!!
And just to reiterate, I do not say these things to be harmful. Just constructive criticism
