And then reply to see if its good?
I will. P.S wrong category
oh which category is it?
Promoting your story
I personally like your story, I feel natural to it. You can work on the spot directing a little more. When the girl was in her hospital clothes, she just changed into her normal clothes and the middle at the hospital. I felt like that was not very realistic.
Duplicate closed. Refer to Promote your story cause I'm bored