ok! also if you can try to condense a lot of the text too, that would be good too lol cuz I actually wrote too much 
and i felt i was repeating a lot so if you can just check it
other than that, i can kinda do the rest of my teacher’s expectations so you don’t have to go to into depth with trying to fix every single thing, but if you can tweak my thesis so it’s clear of the prompt that’s good enough
oh and then title and conclusion…oop