Thanks lol glad it’s not the worst you’ve seen haha
it’s also probably cuz my previous teachers weren’t that good…and didn’t really grade as hard and didn’t really teach me anything 
and then all of a sudden this year i got a pretty strict teacher and my grade is like suffering rn haha so i’m using this essay to hope to bring it up
what i’m mostly concerned about my essay is commentary, analysis, being on topic, and mostly condensing my essay 
condensing is sorta my main problem cuz i write too much and it ends up being really repeating