CAn someone help me with the story description


#1

my story is going to be this, what do you think about the description?

It called “The Real Face”

You, an amazing, young woman are about to get married to the perfect man of your life, what could go wrong right? Is not like his COLD and STRICT MOM are going to do anything to make him leave you… Right?


#2

I think the description is really good and will draw in readers.


#3

You can do this (its the same only one other thing.)You, an amazing, young woman are about to get married to the perfect man of your life, what could go wrong, right? ~it is not like his COLD and STRICT MOM is ~going to make him leave you… Right?

That ~ means what I have changed so you DON’T have to set that in your description!!! I just changed 2 thing


#4

You, an amazing, young woman is about to get married to the perfect man of your life. What could possibly go wrong? It’s not like his COLD and STRICT MOM is going to mess with your relationship… right?


#5