Can someone help smooth out this scene?

Try this:

&MC spot -0.322 110 672 in zone 2 AND MC is fall

@transition fade in white in 0.2

&MC walks to spot -0.322 103 332 in zone 2 in 1 and MC is fall AND MC faces left AND MC moves to layer 5

@zoom on 496 389 to 103% in 0.5

@pause for 3

&MC spot 1.181 185 -369 in zone 2

@MC walks to spot 1.208 193 121 in zone 2 in 1.5 AND MC is idle_treadwater_worried_loop AND MC faces left

@MC starts idle_treadwater_worried_loop

@pause for a beat

&MC spot 1.208 185 -171 in zone 2

@speechbubble reset

MC (cough)
(What the hell?!)

@MC spot 1.208 187 151 in zone 2

@speechbubble is 153 70 to 100% with tail_top_right

MC (idle_treadwater_sad_loop)
(Where am I?)