Can Someone Please Review My Story!

@Toxic.Dreams
@EpisodeShadow
@fcukforcookies

Can You Guys Give Me Your Opinion?

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Sure, I’ll go ahead and read it.

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U can request in my thread if ya want :smiley:

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Yeah

Which Thread?

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It’s actually funny. :joy: Especially the cornrows part. I’ll just say work on some of the directing and layers because some stuff overlaps and people are walking too fast.

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Can you read my story guys?
It’s title is because of Dairy

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Thanks and I will work on :blush:

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Sure, do you have the link?

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This is my story cover

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It’s related to Romance
I hope you like it
Thanks if you read my story.

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It’s funny, but yeah you need to work on spot directing and overlays.

Also it’s pretty short, I’d recommend making it longer for viewers entertainment.

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I know I’m not done with it, I just wanted to see how it was so far, Thanks :blush::blush:

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They are a couple of things wrong with your story.

There was way too many idle animations
• I wasn’t really hooked on.
• When I chose my name for the character, it just automatically want to clara.
•You need more background characters
• And I’m sorry, but the grammar was very bad.
• I’m just telling you this so you can get better
Here are some screenshots

Sorry for this, I am trying to made. I am not knowing grammar better

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My grammar portion is weak

It’s fine, we all need practice

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Thanks to support me

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