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My story name “Amazing Inside” and it’s my first story.
Have you ever wonder what will happen when your emotion come out and interact with you? not just drama, romantic and friendship, but there are other thing such as a mystery power come and try to steal your life.
Here is the link to my story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5843577419464704


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