I like the cover, it’s kind of like an eye catcher, having an interesting cover helps make your story look more professional. The description is good too, not much I have to say about it, it gives a clear statement about what the story is about without giving too much detail.
AH! The splash is so cute!
Glad that you made choices matter, readers want to interact with the stories and they also like to know when their opinions matter.
I love the intros in general they’re so cute!
I like the use of the puppy overlay. I don’t know to me using things like that makes you seem like a very good director.
Like the slight comedy element, I personally like comedic stories, so I like that.
Love that he is ranting at the dog!
THE PUPPY IS SO CUTE!
okay I need to stop and start being professional.
There’s a slight error, a character said something along the lines of “Why did she asked to meet up if she doesn’t pay attention” something along those lines I have a bad memory, but you would want to say “Why did she ASK blah blah blah” I’m sorry if I came off rude, just letting you know because I want you to be the best author you can be.
In the one scene, The one girl is walking as like a background character, but she’s like… floating? So you might want to fix that a little bit so she’s on the ground.
On another note, I do like your use of background characters, it makes the story and directing more professional.
I also like your use of sounds, as I said before, it just makes the story more professional.
Ah, I feel bad, but to me the plot is a little unclear as it is called Puppy Love, and obviously from the intro the puppy turns into a girl, but then there’s Gianna and Mike, in my opinion there’s no real reason to have the whole story plot of them there as this story should focus on the whole puppy turns into a human plot. I don’t know, Like Gianna and Mike should still be characters, but I don’t think their story line should be completely told as this IS supposed to be a story about Jason and Allie. I also found in between the story quite boring, I like to get into a story right away not have to read about how they met at a coffee shop and that’s when Mike and Gianna’s story lines were introduced, I just find no point in that. You have a reaaalllyy good plot, I just think you got sidetracked.