Here’s your review. It is very detailed!
Errors
Chapter Two
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In your transition at the beginning of the car scene, The transition fades in, then out, then in again. You should change it so that the transition fades in one time. I think if you preview it on the app you will understand what i mean. The car also looks to small. You should make sure that the car wheels aren’t able to be seen.
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I think you should use a looping background while they are in the car because it doesn’t look like he is driving.
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This chapter is very short.
Chapter 3
- In this scene Calvin doesn’t have thinking animations and the dialogue text box is like a narrators text box. A way to change this is by changing the dialogue box to a thought bubble to look like he is thinking. Nadia is also frozen in the same animation.
- This chapter is really short too.
Thoughts
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Very clean directing and all the characters enter and leave correctly.
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You should let characters have animations while the other character is talking and i think you should use a a wider variety of scared animations when Nadia gets shocked.
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I think there were some spelling mistakes so I think you should check over your script again or get someone to see if there are spelling mistakes.
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The first chapter is very short so i think you should add more scenes.
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Episode two and three are also very short so it would be better to add more scenes .