Can someone review my story? I read yours

I just published my new story and I’d love some honest opinion so I can improve and fix my mistakes. I’ll read yours and if you have instagram, I follow you on instagram.
Story Name: DIAMOND’S KEEPER
Author: Tulipsode
Genre: Adventure
Style: Limelight
Episodes: 3
Description: Far away in the universe, there is the diamond planet, where the king is hungry for power, will you be able to stop him? (Male MC, CC, Choices matter,+3LI, LGBT+ option)
Story Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5546434510389248
Story Cover:

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