Can someone rewrite this part of my script? choice inside of a choice

I’m a new author and IDK how to make a choice inside of a choice. can someone re-write this part of the script and change it to make it work? basically what’s happening is she sees her friends from last year, and her new friends and the choice is which friend to go to. but inside the choice of her going to her friend saige there’s another question so when I preview it’s like this:
Who should I hang out with?
hang out with saige
but there supposed to be the option to hang out with amaya and layla

heres my current script

NARRATOR

Who should you go over to?

(Going over to Saige and her Friends could possibly help you get more out there and get to your goal)

choice
“Go hang out with Saige”{

INT. BOOKSHELVES - DAY
@zoom on 0 0 to 100% in 0
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 185 180
@ALIE moves to layer 3
@LIAM spot 0.673 242 211
@LIAM moves to layer 0
@BRIAR spot 0.704 104 199
@BRIAR moves to layer 1
@SAIGE spot 0.623 206 231
@SAIGE moves to layer -1
@ETHAN spot 0.599 154 252
@ETHAN moves to layer 0
@BRIAR faces right
@ETHAN faces right
@LIAM walks to spot 0.673 260 178
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 243 205 in zone 1
@ALIE moves to layer -1

@ETHAN is think_rubchin
ETHAN

(I wonder who that is...)

@SAIGE is talk_neutral_loop

    SAIGE

OMG! Hey, [NAME]! I haven't seen you since summer!

    NARRATOR

Try and make a good impression on them! Hint: Briar and Ethan like funny people with attitude!

choice
“No sh*t, Saige. It’s summer camp”{

    ALIE

No sh*t, Saige. It's summer camp.

@ALIE is laugh_giggle
@ETHAN is laugh_crackup
@BRIAR is laugh_chuckle
@LIAM is laugh_chuckle

@SAIGE is eyeroll_sarcastic
@SAIGE is talk_armscrossed_shrug_neutral

    SAIGE

Okay, Okay. You don't have to slam me like that.

@ALIE is laugh_chuckle

    ETHAN

That was brave, new girl. Usually if you mess with Saige like that she beats you up.

    ALIE

Oh, I'm not-

    SAIGE

How about we go to Moonscape Cafe? I'm thirsty.

    ALIE

Saige, Your-

    SAIGE

I know what your about to say, but dont say it!

    LIAM

C'mon guys, let's just go.

@BRIAR exits left
@ETHAN exits left
@ALIE exits left
@LIAM exits left
@SAIGE exits left
}
NARRATOR

Try and make a good impression on them! Hint: Briar and Ethan like funny people with attitude!
"Yeah, I missed you."{
    ALIE

Yeah, I missed you.

    SAIGE

Yeah, same.

    ETHAN

(This girl's kinda boring)

    SAIGE

How about we go to Moonscape Cafe? I'm thirsty.

    LIAM

C'mon guys, let's go.

@BRIAR exits left
@ETHAN exits left
@ALIE exits left
@LIAM exits left
@SAIGE exits left
}
“Hang out with Amaya and Layla” {

INT. BOOKSHELVES - DAY
@zoom on 0 0 to 100% in 0
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 185 180
@ALIE moves to layer 3
@AMAYA spot 0.673 242 211
@AMAYA moves to layer 0
@LAYLA spot 0.704 104 199
@LAYLA moves to layer 1
@AMAYA faces left
@LAYLA faces right
@LAYLA is talk_neutral_loop
@AMAYA is talk_neutral_loop

    ALIE

Hey guys

    AMAYA

...

    LAYLA

...

}
NARRATOR
Looks like their ignoring you…
choice
“Repeat yourself”{
ALIE

Hello?

    AMAYA

...

    LAYLA

...

    ALIE

(ugh, im gonna go find Saige)

@transition fade out black in 2
}
“Leave”{

    ALIE

(ugh, im gonna go find Saige)

@transition fade out black in 2
}

if you can make me a working script ill give you a shoutout a the end of my story just lmk your episode username

This should work now:

    NARRATOR
Who should you go over to?
(Going over to Saige and her Friends could possibly help you get more out there and get to your goal)

choice
“Go hang out with Saige”{

INT. BOOKSHELVES - DAY
@zoom on 0 0 to 100% in 0
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 185 180
@ALIE moves to layer 3
@LIAM spot 0.673 242 211
@LIAM moves to layer 0
@BRIAR spot 0.704 104 199
@BRIAR moves to layer 1
@SAIGE spot 0.623 206 231
@SAIGE moves to layer -1
@ETHAN spot 0.599 154 252
@ETHAN moves to layer 0
@BRIAR faces right
@ETHAN faces right
@LIAM walks to spot 0.673 260 178
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 243 205 in zone 1
@ALIE moves to layer -1

@ETHAN is think_rubchin
ETHAN
(I wonder who that is…)
@SAIGE is talk_neutral_loop

    SAIGE
OMG! Hey, [NAME]! I haven't seen you since summer!

    NARRATOR
Try and make a good impression on them! Hint: Briar and Ethan like funny people with attitude!

choice
“No sh*t, Saige. It’s summer camp”{

    ALIE
No sh*t, Saige. It's summer camp.

@ALIE is laugh_giggle
@ETHAN is laugh_crackup
@BRIAR is laugh_chuckle
@LIAM is laugh_chuckle

@SAIGE is eyeroll_sarcastic
@SAIGE is talk_armscrossed_shrug_neutral

    SAIGE
Okay, Okay. You don't have to slam me like that.

@ALIE is laugh_chuckle

    ETHAN
That was brave, new girl. Usually if you mess with Saige like that she beats you up.

    ALIE
Oh, I'm not-

    SAIGE
How about we go to Moonscape Cafe? I'm thirsty.

    ALIE
Saige, your-

    SAIGE
I know what your about to say, but dont say it!

    LIAM
C'mon guys, let's just go.

@BRIAR exits left
@ETHAN exits left
@ALIE exits left
@LIAM exits left
@SAIGE exits left
}“Yeah, I missed you.”{
ALIE
Yeah, I missed you.

    SAIGE
Yeah, same.

    ETHAN
(This girl's kinda boring)

    SAIGE
How about we go to Moonscape Cafe? I'm thirsty.

    LIAM
C'mon guys, let's go.

@BRIAR exits left
@ETHAN exits left
@ALIE exits left
@LIAM exits left
@SAIGE exits left
}
} “Hang out with Amaya and Layla” {

INT. BOOKSHELVES - DAY
@zoom on 0 0 to 100% in 0
@ALIE walks to spot 0.673 185 180
@ALIE moves to layer 3
@AMAYA spot 0.673 242 211
@AMAYA moves to layer 0
@LAYLA spot 0.704 104 199
@LAYLA moves to layer 1
@AMAYA faces left
@LAYLA faces right
@LAYLA is talk_neutral_loop
@AMAYA is talk_neutral_loop

    ALIE
Hey guys

    AMAYA
...

    LAYLA
...
    NARRATOR
Looks like their ignoring you...

choice
“Repeat yourself”{
ALIE
Hello?

    AMAYA
...

    LAYLA
...

    ALIE
(Ugh, im gonna go find Saige)

@transition fade out black in 2
} “Leave”{

    ALIE
(Ugh, im gonna go find Saige)

@transition fade out black in 2
}
}

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OMG thank you! If you want credit just reply with your instagram, or whatever you want me to give credit too.

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No problem!
You don’t have to give credit for this.

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