Can someone tell me if my script looks good?

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#1

I’m not done yet, but episode keeps telling me there are errors. Can someone help please?

INT. DUMPY APARTMENT BEDROOM - DAY

@ CHARACTERGIRL spot 1.280 126 0 in zone 2 AND CHARACTERGIRL faces right

@ CHARACTERGIRL changes into LOLA_sleep

@ pause for 3

@ pan to zone 2

@ pan to zone 3

@ pan to zone 2

sound yawn_female

@ CHARACTERGIRL is yawn_bored

@ CHARACTERGIRL is think_rubchin

    CHARACTERGIRL (talk_unsure)
(Am I forgetting something?)

@ pause for 4

@ CHARACTERGIRL is scream_angry

    CHARACTERGIRL (talk_angry)
SHIT MY INTERVIEW!

@ CHARACTERGIRL is run_athletic_neutral_loop

@ CHARACTERGIRL exists zone 2 from screen left

@ CHARACTERGIRL walks to upscreen right zone 1 AND CHARACTERGIRL changes into outfit

@ CHARACTERGIRL enters zone 2 from screen left AND CHARACTERGIRL stands in screen left

    CHARACTERGIRL (talk_reassure_neutral)
Good enough!

@ CHARACTERGIRL exists from left

@ transition fade in black 5

@ pause for 3

@ transition fade out black 5

EXT. LUXURY APARTMENT - DAY with effect LIGHT SNOW

@ transition fade in black 5

INT. FASHION HALL - DAY

@ cut to zone 2

@ pause for a beat

@ CHARACTERBOY spot 1.289 246 90
@ CHARACTERBOY stands screen far right in zone 2 AND BRENT faces left

sound whistle_flirt
@ CHARACTERBOY is idle_phone_neutral_loop
@ zoom on 155 0 to 269% in 0
@ zoom on 148 353 to 269% in 4

@ pause for a 3

@ zoom reset


#2

What is the error message/code?


#3

@purple_ghost on every few lines theres a yellow triangle


#4

What messages show up in this box?

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#5

One issue is though that you have spaces after your @. There should be no space between @ and the word following it.


#6

idle_phone_neutral_loop isn’t an animation.

Have a wonderful day!

~ Rochelle C.


#7

What you should do:

@CHARACTERGIRL exits left AND CHARACTERGIRL is run_athletic_neutral_loop


#8

@pause for 3
or @pause for a beat

not @pause for a 3


#9

I guess it should be:
@ CHARACTERBOY spot 1.289 246 90

@ BRENT stands screen far right in zone 2 AND BRENT faces left

??


#10

There should be no space between @ and the word next to it.
Ex: It should be
@CHARACTER
not @ CHARACTER

Hope this helped. :slight_smile:


#11

@Purple_Ghost i know but on forums it wouldn’t let me paste my original script AND @WrittenbyRochelle my story is written in limelight


#12

i just changed the names to post here


#13

If you want her to leave the background while running you have to write:
@CHARACTER exits left/right AND CHARACTER does it while [animation]


#14

Is this limelight or ink?


#15

limelight


#16

Ok, so did you spell all the names of the animations right?


#17

yea its starting to look better now


#18

I’m going to write what’s wrong, I’m going to take some minutes


#19

I got a question first, at the end you wrote CHARACTERBOY and BRENT is the same person or two people?


#20

ya its the same person Brent is characterboy i prob forgot to change that