Can someone test out my story and give me a true opinion

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#1

Can someone pleasePLEASE test out my story ‘Dreams of a child’ I want an honest opinion on it!
You’ll need 3 passes that you don’t mind using!
Link to the story :point_down:

#2

If you want a detailed review my friend @Saasha reviews stories on instagram and recetly started on forums , her reviews helped me a lot. You can ask at her review thread on her profile.

#3

Thanks for your help!

#4

Pleasure.

#5

Thanks for mentioning me girl.

#6

I read all three episodes and… it’s fairly good. Maybe just work on your zooms a bit and make sure your characters don’t just randomly appear when you transition to a new background. Also, the second episode was EXTREMELY short, I’d say try to make your episodes 800 lines minimum. Other than that, great job!

#7

Thanks for the advice! I’ll definitely change those things! :slight_smile:

#8

why is your profile picture of woahvicky lol

#9

If you need a really detailed review I would be happy to help. Here’s my link :

#10

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#11