I think you’d benefit from getting a proofreader. I noticed a lot of grammatical errors throughout the Episode.
Contractions not having apostrophes:
“Cant” —> “Can’t”
“were” —> “we’re”
“Youre” —> “You’re”
“Im” —> “I’m”
“Its” —> “It’s” (in certain cases its is possesive and it’s is the contraction of it is)
“id” —> “I’d”
Incorrect ending punctuation marks:
“Why does my family literally only interrupt me in good times.” —> “Why does my family literally only interrupt me in good times?”
“Why is she so obsessed with this movie.” —> “Why is she so obsessed with this movie?”
Abbreviations outside of texting:
“OMG!” —> “Oh my God!”
I also noticed uncapitalized words at the start of several sentences, plus I’s in the middle of them. I is always capitalized. Also there were some sentences that had an unnecessary space between the ending word and the ending punctuation. There was also a comma that was unnecessarily spaced in the middle of a sentence. That and no spacing between an ending punctuation mark and the starting word of another sentence. Also random capitalization in the middle of a sentence like the word “customize”. Customize isn’t a proper noun so it shouldn’t be capitalized unless it’s the starting word of a sentence.
Also there are some awkwardly worded sentences:
“Parts of this story will go into the past. (like, 1900s) resulting that it contains different beliefs of people from that time. there will also be scenes which may be triggering to people.like mature language/bullying . I will give a disclaimer before a scene starts…” —> “This story partially takes place in the 1900s, as such it may reflect outdated or now unacceptable beliefs. Potentially triggering scenes may contain mature language or depictions of bullying, a disclaimer will always pop up beforehand.”
“Why does my family literally only interrupt me in good times.” —> “Why does my family only interrupt me when I’m enjoying myself / having fun?”
Story-wise I couldn’t really tell what the plot was. It obviously has some sort of focus on bullying but other than that I didn’t really understand what was going on. I think the main character became friends with the other girl way too quickly. I don’t think the first scenes (of her room and with mom/dad/brother) added much at all. Character-wise I found everything too vulgar and dramatic. I don’t feel bad for the main character being bullied based off of her own actions and attitude, maybe show off a softer side to her so the reader can relate more?
Also, I think creating a main menu at the start of the Episode with a glossary would be helpful because ethe reader messages disappeared too quickly to read and as an American the majority of terminology flew straight past me. Maybe add the terms and conditions loop into its own section, that way the story doesn’t start with “Hi, I’m the author…”?
For example, if the menu looks like this:
If they click “Start Episode” it tells them to click “Content Warning” and at the end of the warnings have “Yes” +1 or gain read terms and conditions or “No”. If they have >0 read terms and conditions points or gained read terms and conditions they can access the story.
Or do the simple way of just asking them to read them and trusting that they have… lol