:yay: Cherii's Story Reviews :yay:

Thank you, I’d love it if you reviewed my story :purple_heart:
Author: @stargirl4
Genre: Drama
Summary: Everything about him was grey, like the smoke he exhaled. His hair, his eyes, his smoke,
his anger, his aptitude, his dreams.
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Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6266207879233536
Ig: @/stargirl_episode

Thank you so much for the review. As for popping up, it did not seem to pop up in the web previewer, but I’ll still see.

I checked this – this wasn’t happening in this outfit choice. May be it was a glitch.

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ok i hope it can get fixed <3

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The Good:

  • The plot really intrigued me.
  • It’s really unique and I love it!
  • I understand and love everything that’s happening so far.

The Bad:

  • I think the biggest error in your story is your grammar usages. I couldn’t get all of it but these are the ones I got.
For Example:


Should be changed to: Yes, Jayla. I’m listening. You just talk way too much and I kind of zoned out.

Should be changed to: Why don’t you get yourself a best friend, that wouldn’t even talk at all.

Should be changed to: Girl, you didn’t think I was ACTUALLY mad, did yo-

Should be changed to: That’s my cue to leave. See you at home, Azarionya!

Should be changed to: I won’t let my only living son ruin this for me.

  • Your speech bubbles sometimes aren’t in the right positions.
Summary




They all are too small and/or not at the center. They’re their below (near the speaker’s waistline) and not near the bust/stomach area.

  • Sometimes, the character’s layering isn’t right.
For Example


You can see that the girl is on top of the trash can. You can make the trash an overlay (layer 1) and make the girl behind the overlay (layer 0)

The girl, who’s taking care of the MC, looks very small. Increase her size just a bit.

Zoom in the screen so it doesn’t look too weird and the characters don’t look too tiny.

The MC looks tiny. She looks like she’s in the backseat instead of in the front. The male looks a bit big. Increase the MC size a bit and lower the male size just a tad (:

Use & to spot the characters and the overlay car. When you used @ to spot the characters and the vehicle, it took a huge pause in zone 1 before coming to zone 2 and showing them. Same thing happened to this scene:

It took a huge pause before showing us the character and the background because you used @ instead of & to spot the characters

  • Whenever you’re using transitions, it transitions but still appears in the same background before going to the next instead of transitioning to the next background. It’s possible you’re using @transition fade out when you’re supposed to do @transition fade in and vice versa.
Example

I really like your story, for real. I will continue like one or two chapters more. But the grammar errors kinda tick me off. I’ll suggest that you should get a proofreader before publishing so they can correct the mistakes you missed or didn’t even know they’re mistakes. I also suggest that you should get a beta-reader so they can show and tell you how to fix your directing mistakes and your storytelling! Thank you for requesting for a review. Good luck on your writing <3

Hey I would love it if you review my story I just started writing

Author: Yoshi
Genre: Sci-Fi
Summary: One party is all it takes for you to receive your second life. A life in which you are the hero. In your “normal” life you cheering “From the Sidelines.”
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Credit @Faintest
Style: LL
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5456564097581056

Heyyy tysm 4 making this thread. :blob_hearts:
Title: Smoke Then Lollipops
Author: 80
Style/Genre:* LL - Fantasy/Drama (Comedy on the app)
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Link:

App Summary

You’ve got quite the reputation in your city, but what happens when your soulmate is the biggest baddie in the whole country.Who gets to dominate and rule the game?[CHOICES MATTER]

More info:

The story is a comedy that deals with Rac*sm, classism, body image issues, bullying and results of peer pressure etc. - later episodes [TW]

My insta @Episode_80 ~💫

Hey I would love to hear your reviews regarding my newly published story…SINISTER LOVE
Author- Mikasa and Panda
Genre- Thriller
Summary- A rich and frivolous boy suddenly discovers his dark side… What impact will it have on others? Can anyone survive his murderous clutches or will everyone fall prey?
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Style- Crime thriller (Limelight)
Link- http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6453440145981440

Author: Starz
Genre: Action and Sci-fi
Summary: In a dystopian world where people with superpowers are seen are more superior to humans, you’re given an opportunity to create a life worth living. Will you prevail? And find love?
Style : ink
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6288588278530048
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Is a Fantasy and Romance story
Is in INK and Limelight
Author: Julina Star

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A small summary of it: Sabrina live a normal life, until she meet Antonio. Old enemies are coming back, will her life change for the better or worse, follow her journey filled with lies, drama and romance
Link to my story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4630420235550720

My Instagram: @Julinastar18

This is my story and I hope you’ll give it a chance hehe

:fire:Title: What Women Want
:fire:Description: You left what you used to do to forget your tragic past. But, what if one day the one you left behind needed you back? Would you come back? [F MC/F LI/LIM CC/LGBTQ/MINI GAMES]
:fire:Genre: LGBTQ+, Action, & Romance
:fire:Author: Emerald
:fire:No. of Episodes: Four
:fire:Instagram: @emerald.epi
:fire:Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5661398687481856

The Good:

  • I love this story! After reading about three scenes, I instantly got hooked into the story & can never stop reading!
  • I love the 40s directing of the story. Very beautiful!
  • The chapter development throughout the story is amazing!

The Ugly:

  • NOTHING :joy::joy:

Thank you for writing this lovely story. I’m waiting for more episodes. I’ll recommend your story on my page (@/cheriirecommends on instagram)

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ahh thank you for the review!

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I would love a review

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Author: CassieC
Genre: Drama
Summary: Welcome to the World’s Most Eligible Daredevil Reality Show, where contestants must compete to win 1 Million dollars doing dangerous dares and challenges. Will you come out on top?
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Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6531616613793792

Hope you have a chance to review my new story! I could really use some help with feedback and critiques.

Lost In The Stars

Author: Mare Acacia
Genre: Adventure
Summary: When shipwreck leaves you lost at sea with a band of pirates will you use the stars to navigate? With a nutty king on your tail and treasure on the map this sea is full of secrets.
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Style: LL
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6008737369882624

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Hi! I hope that you can review my story when you get a chance to! I’m open to both positive and negative feedback so please don’t hold back if there’s something you don’t like :).

LINK BELOW:

The Good:

  • The directing is AMAZING! I loved everything about the directing throughout the whole story.
  • I love every adventure aspect throughout the story.
  • The minigames were unique & fun to complete’

The Ugly

  • Throughout the whole story, only the MC was in the idle animation. I tried to click the story out, restart the app, & even delete the app and get it back but the MC still stayed in that position.
For Example:



  • There is a directing malfunction here.
For Example

  • I don’t know if this was because of the idle animation glitch but the speech bubble wasn’t in the right position.
For Example

I enjoyed reading your story! It was a fun adventure while reading. If anybody is interested in adventure stories, I recommend you reading this one (:

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Thank you so much! I’m not exactly sure what happened with your character but I’ll look into it for sure. I’m so glad you enjoyed it, thanks for the review!

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Name: Flash (complete)
Author: Hxxd → @hx.episode
Genre: Mystery
Style: INK
Chapters: 3
Status: Complete
Description: You see a chain of events, but who do they belong to, and what do they mean? You’re out on a mission in search for vengeance, will you find what you’re looking for?
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5778327886692352
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I’m still reading and reviewing! It’s taking me a bit longer because of school and work but I’m getting to them (: