:yay: Cherii's Story Reviews :yay:

ciaraxoxoc · June 4, 2021, 3:45am

The Good:

I love the directing!
The plot is well suited for being a romantic story.
Each character’s development meets its requirements!
I love the MC

The Ugly:

I strongly dislike Ryan
There’s not much I can say here. You did a terrific job on everything. There weren’t many grammar errors, the directing of each background, overlay, and character spotting were excellent. Well done!

baechulgi · June 4, 2021, 5:06am

Hi there! Thank you for doing this! Here’s my story.

Author: liawrites
Genre: LGBTQ+
Summary: It’s 1948. Daphne, an aspiring actress, risks a secret affair with the CEO of Jupiter Studios for stardom. Things take a turn when she falls for his wife, Evelyn Neptune, on set.
Cover:

Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5239410494472192

vidushii22 · June 4, 2021, 7:10am

Thank you so much I am so happy that you liked it

lqwalter · June 9, 2021, 12:48am

I hope I can score a spot in your reviewing list

Title: Treasure In You
Author: L.Q. Walter
Instagram: @lqwalter.episode
Genre: Adventure/Romance
Chapters: 10 (more coming soon)
Style: Limelight
Description: After discovering an old diary she believes will lead her to the location of a long lost treasure, she teams with an unlikely ally: a guy who is downright cocky yet wickedly hot!
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5342141547216896
Cover:

Danielle318 · June 9, 2021, 3:55pm

Hello. I would like my story reviewed.

Mia_writes2 · June 16, 2021, 9:59am

Author: Mia
Genre: Romance/drama/action lol
Summary: Raven was always feared and envied…that was until she started working for the ruthless Blaze monroe. With a mysterious past, a new romance and dangers will she make it out alive?
Cover:

Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6384353052131328

mystique_writer · June 16, 2021, 11:36am

Hi! I have published this story just yesterday and I would be very grateful if I could get any feedback on it!

Title: Our Wedding Affair
Author: Mystique
Description: Attending her sister’s wedding, Eleanor tries to stay away from the drama that is surrounding her. Then she meets James and starts questioning her life values for the first time.
Genre: drama
Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5349809620975616
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ciaraxoxoc · June 17, 2021, 8:20pm

The Good:

I didn’t get bored at all while reading.
Very interesting & intriguing!

The Ugly:

Sometimes the characters pop up instead of walking to the position or manually being there. Try using & instead of @ to spot characters.

For Example

When characters are finished talking, their lips is still moving or when they’re rear positions, they’re still moving side to side (because they neutral_talk_rear, something like that). Make sure they’re in idle or idle_rear when they are suppose to finish talking.

For Example

The girl who’s in the rear position is talking to the MC, but instead of facing the MC she’s facing the boy. Make her face the MC

For Example

Idk if this is a glitch but there was an outfit choice & I chose an outfit. But when I finished, a different fit appeared instead of the one I chose.

For Example

The format is kinda off. The MC is so tiny & the Plus Size character is a little too big. Try lowering the PS & make the MC look bigger.

For Example

I enjoyed reading. Ngl, chapter one was a bit boring but the story become interesting in chapter two or three . it was still fun to read. Good luck on the contest & I hope you enjoyed this review.

stargirl4 · June 17, 2021, 8:53pm

Thank you, I’d love it if you reviewed my story
Author: @stargirl4
Genre: Drama
Summary: Everything about him was grey, like the smoke he exhaled. His hair, his eyes, his smoke,
his anger, his aptitude, his dreams.
Cover:

Style: Limelight
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6266207879233536
Ig: @/stargirl_episode

AnnC · June 18, 2021, 2:28am

Thank you so much for the review. As for popping up, it did not seem to pop up in the web previewer, but I’ll still see.

I checked this – this wasn’t happening in this outfit choice. May be it was a glitch.

ciaraxoxoc · June 18, 2021, 3:39am

ok i hope it can get fixed <3

ciaraxoxoc · June 30, 2021, 3:22am

The Good:

The plot really intrigued me.
It’s really unique and I love it!
I understand and love everything that’s happening so far.

The Bad:

I think the biggest error in your story is your grammar usages. I couldn’t get all of it but these are the ones I got.

For Example:

Should be changed to: Yes, Jayla. I’m listening. You just talk way too much and I kind of zoned out.

Should be changed to: Why don’t you get yourself a best friend, that wouldn’t even talk at all.

Should be changed to: Girl, you didn’t think I was ACTUALLY mad, did yo-

Should be changed to: That’s my cue to leave. See you at home, Azarionya!

Should be changed to: I won’t let my only living son ruin this for me.

Your speech bubbles sometimes aren’t in the right positions.

Summary

They all are too small and/or not at the center. They’re their below (near the speaker’s waistline) and not near the bust/stomach area.

Sometimes, the character’s layering isn’t right.

For Example

You can see that the girl is on top of the trash can. You can make the trash an overlay (layer 1) and make the girl behind the overlay (layer 0)

The girl, who’s taking care of the MC, looks very small. Increase her size just a bit.

Zoom in the screen so it doesn’t look too weird and the characters don’t look too tiny.

The MC looks tiny. She looks like she’s in the backseat instead of in the front. The male looks a bit big. Increase the MC size a bit and lower the male size just a tad (:

Use & to spot the characters and the overlay car. When you used @ to spot the characters and the vehicle, it took a huge pause in zone 1 before coming to zone 2 and showing them. Same thing happened to this scene:

It took a huge pause before showing us the character and the background because you used @ instead of & to spot the characters

Whenever you’re using transitions, it transitions but still appears in the same background before going to the next instead of transitioning to the next background. It’s possible you’re using @transition fade out when you’re supposed to do @transition fade in and vice versa.

Example

I really like your story, for real. I will continue like one or two chapters more. But the grammar errors kinda tick me off. I’ll suggest that you should get a proofreader before publishing so they can correct the mistakes you missed or didn’t even know they’re mistakes. I also suggest that you should get a beta-reader so they can show and tell you how to fix your directing mistakes and your storytelling! Thank you for requesting for a review. Good luck on your writing <3

Miskymohamed · June 30, 2021, 8:10pm

Hey I would love it if you review my story I just started writing

Yoshi · June 30, 2021, 9:53pm

Author: Yoshi
Genre: Sci-Fi
Summary: One party is all it takes for you to receive your second life. A life in which you are the hero. In your “normal” life you cheering “From the Sidelines.”
Cover:

Credit @Faintest
Style: LL
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5456564097581056

Callme_80 · July 1, 2021, 2:12am

Heyyy tysm 4 making this thread.
Title: Smoke Then Lollipops
Author: 80
Style/Genre:* LL - Fantasy/Drama (Comedy on the app)
Cover:

Link:

App Summary

You’ve got quite the reputation in your city, but what happens when your soulmate is the biggest baddie in the whole country.Who gets to dominate and rule the game?[CHOICES MATTER]

More info:

The story is a comedy that deals with Rac*sm, classism, body image issues, bullying and results of peer pressure etc. - later episodes [TW]

My insta @Episode_80 ~💫

aishani · July 1, 2021, 5:34am

Hey I would love to hear your reviews regarding my newly published story…SINISTER LOVE
Author- Mikasa and Panda
Genre- Thriller
Summary- A rich and frivolous boy suddenly discovers his dark side… What impact will it have on others? Can anyone survive his murderous clutches or will everyone fall prey?
Cover-

Style- Crime thriller (Limelight)
Link- http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6453440145981440

Ayples0 · July 5, 2021, 10:46am

Author: Starz
Genre: Action and Sci-fi
Summary: In a dystopian world where people with superpowers are seen are more superior to humans, you’re given an opportunity to create a life worth living. Will you prevail? And find love?
Style : ink
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6288588278530048
Cover:

julan · July 8, 2021, 6:01pm

Is a Fantasy and Romance story
Is in INK and Limelight
Author: Julina Star

Cover:
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A small summary of it: Sabrina live a normal life, until she meet Antonio. Old enemies are coming back, will her life change for the better or worse, follow her journey filled with lies, drama and romance
Link to my story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4630420235550720

My Instagram: @Julinastar18

emerald.epi · July 8, 2021, 6:03pm

This is my story and I hope you’ll give it a chance hehe

Title: What Women Want
Description: You left what you used to do to forget your tragic past. But, what if one day the one you left behind needed you back? Would you come back? [F MC/F LI/LIM CC/LGBTQ/MINI GAMES]
Genre: LGBTQ+, Action, & Romance
Author: Emerald
No. of Episodes: Four
Instagram: @emerald.epi
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5661398687481856

ciaraxoxoc · July 16, 2021, 8:00pm

The Good:

I love this story! After reading about three scenes, I instantly got hooked into the story & can never stop reading!
I love the 40s directing of the story. Very beautiful!
The chapter development throughout the story is amazing!

The Ugly:

NOTHING

Thank you for writing this lovely story. I’m waiting for more episodes. I’ll recommend your story on my page (@/cheriirecommends on instagram)