Cherry's Story Reviews 🍒 [CLOSED]

Dear, Episodians! Welcome to Cherry’s Story Reviews. I’m Jana, but people call me Cherry,
too. Lately, I had much free time, so I decided to fill it with reading Episode stories. So here we are. All you need to do is fill the form and I’ll review your story.

I’ll send you my opinion about the plot, grammar, cover, title, description, directing, etc!

When I’m done with the review I’ll PM it to you or post it here.

Story name:
Author:
Story link:
Number of episodes (max 5): (how many episodes you want me to read)

I’ll be totally honest — if I don’t like something I’ll write that. If you cannot accept constructive criticism and my opinion, then I suggest leaving this thread.

• Sidereal by @aprilish
• Ganglands by @MissKat97
• Hopeless Girl by @Clara23
• Queen of Ice & King of Darkness by @Wanna.be.author
• Crimson Red by @NewEpisodeFanatic
• The Wrong Match by @Hijiko
• Agent 66: Born to Kill by @Rose.xo_97
• Sunny by @Penny2
• Vengeance by @lauraepi
• The Eye of The Eye by @Alexis251
• The game of Heartbreak by @Miss.Moonlight
• POISONED LIPS by @Bernice_J
• The vampire prophecy by @N.Nova

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Thank you for this and please, be 100% brutally honest! I can handle criticism.

Story name: AW: Bio-Hysteria
Author: Zey
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6001721244712960
Number of episodes: 3

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Thanks for the thread!
I wont mind you replying honestly…
Here’s mine…

Title: Shado
Author: Roy
Description: After tragedy, Roy returns to civilization a changed women. She begins her crusade, determined to put things right, with the help of her trusted people,waging a one-woman on crime
Instagram : roy_episode
Style: Ink
Chapters want to review: all 5
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5108744574074880

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Story name: Dirty Little Secret
Author: Anongirl
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5833300720615424
Number of episodes:`5

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Hi, thank you for making this thread!
I’d love if you’d give my story a shot! Here are the details:

Title: Sidereal
Author: aprilish
How many chapters: As many as you wish, of course
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Limelight
Blurb: An unlikely turn of events brings Dahlia from outer space to outside Felix’s window. Join them on their star-crossed journey as they cherish the wonders of being worlds apart.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5063859204587520

The covers~

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Thank you so much! :heartbeat:

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Story name: Ganglands
Author: Miss Kat
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5929128717516800
Number of episodes: 13

I have one reviewer already, but I’d love a second opinion! I published my first batch of chapters on June 4th and I have 85 reads so far (I know it’s not about the reads, but I’m hoping to gain more readers as time goes on!) Thank you SO much for doing this!!

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STORY: AW: Bio-Hysteria by @Zey
Attention! Possible spoilers.

The Review

• Plot
The plot of the story is really, really interesting! First few minutes of first chapter caught my attention. Your plot is very original. I usually don’t read sci-fi stories, but my eyes were wide open when I was reading yours. I like how you represent racism through your original, futuristic way. I love how the story is mysterious. I read three chapters and I know a little bit of events in the story, but there’s many details that you hint but don’t tell us the whole story. It all just fits perfectly. I’m stunned.

Also, I like that things that happen in the story affect characters’ emotions and actions. For example:

• Grammar
Your grammar is perfect! I didn’t notice any mistakes!

• Cover
When I saw the story cover I was like “wow!”. It is so simple, but yet so interesting and mysterious! You used nice fonts and pictures. I would suggest adding the small cover too. I would use same pictures, fonts and style, and just make it in needed size.

• Title
Mysterious and interesting. It goes well with the story vibe.

• Description
It describes what happens in the story, but it doesn’t reveal anything. Great description, if you ask me.

• Directing
Your directing is amazing! You’re placing character well, I love transitions. You use zooms great, but I would recommend this: When you’re directing a scene with dialogue, I would zoom more on characters. So instead of this:


It would be like this:

Do you get what I say?

Also, your overlay work is on point! They’re juuust perfect. They fit the scenes and are cut well. You’re very creative with overlays!

• Other
You have so much diversity in your story! There are all races, there is LGBTQ+ community and many more!

I love your backgrounds! They fit the story so well and they’re really pretty and good quality.

The CC scene at the start is so creative!

I love gaining humanity points. I think gaining relationship points with others would be nice too, but that’s up to you.

Eda is so freaking cute!

Overall, I’m very excited for the next part. I hope you’ll get more reads, because you truly deserve them! Count on me recommending your story. x

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Hello, thank you for this!
Here are my story details:
Story Title: Hopeless Girl
author : Clara23
Type ; Romance/Drama
Description: We say that a first love can never be forgotten, that it will always stay in our heart, but what happens when our first love left and doing so, took our heart away?
Number of Chapters out: 15 (Fully Released) but 5 is okay
Story Link: [http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5742303772999680]

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**Story name:Queen of Ice & King of Darkness
**Author:Wanna be Author
**Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4752177148264448
**Number of episodes: 3

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Thank you so much both for the compliments and the suggestions! I was kind of scared about my grammar but I’m happy that it’s fine :sweat_smile: I’ll implement your suggestions about zooming and relationship points in the next episodes and I’ll create the small cover asap. Again, thank you for the support and the honesty!

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Hi Jana, I love that you would read up to 5 chapters for your reviews. Most people would only read 3. I love constructive feedbacks. Thanks so much for your post and I hope you will enjoy my story.

Story Title: Crimson Red

Author: NewEpisodeFanatic

Episodes: 8 (Ongoing). Yes, please review your maximum of 5 chapters

Genre: Fantasy / Romance / Drama

Style: Limelight, Customizable Characters

Description: A love story set in a fantasy world. We follow the story of Crimson Red Ruby, the fearless leader of the Ruby realm, and the love, lust and passion that ensues.

Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/newepisodefanatic/

Link to story: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4869484986302464

Cover:

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hi ! I’d love a review from you :slight_smile:

Story name: The Wrong Match
Author: Hijiko
Story link: https://www.episodeinteractive.com/s/i/5471673785843712
Number of episodes (max 5): 3

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Hi! Would love to get a review from ya :hugs:

Tittle: Agent 66: Born to Kill
Author: xoRoséxo
Chapters: 3
Description: Agent 66 is an infamous assassin. But when a mission gone wrong, 66 kidnaps Sasha - his possible witness, and sets to discovers the truth before it’s too late.
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/4722588854321152
Instagram: xoroses.episode
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Story name: Sunny
Author: episode.penny
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6577624895586304
Number of episodes (max 5): 4

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Thanks so much for this thread💕

Story title, Vengeance
Author, Laura King (me)
Story link, http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5471622960316416
Story Description, After her fiancé was shot point blank Special Agent Bailey Lopez now finds herself a target as her fiancé’s killer is now after her. Will she escape or will Vengeance take over?
Number of episodes, 3 (on-going)

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Hey Alexis here. Thanks so much for this and feel free to be as completely honest.

Story title: The Eye of The Eye
Author: Alexis
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6345319065649152
Number of episodes: all 4

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HI! It would mean a lot if you could review the story I’ve just published!

Story title: The game of Heartbreak
Author: Miss moonlight
Story link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6598317548371968
Number of episodes: 15 (but you can simply review the first 5)
Cover:


thank you so much and I hope you enjoy it!!

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Story name: POISONED LIPS
Author: Bernice J
Story link:http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6069666773729280
Number of episodes: 5

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STORY: Shado by @Roy
Attention! Possible spoilers.

The Review

• Plot and writing style
Although the plot is about gangs, it is not cliché. I usually don’t read gang stories, but I really liked yours. You show us why Roy becomes part of the gang and wht she wants revenge. She is a strong female character, but still with flaws. I really liked that. There is not many more things happening in the story, so I can’t write more.

What I disliked is that Roy and Noah cliked instantly. In the car we can see that Roy is not interested in him, but later she decides to go on a date with him. Maybe they had history but that wasn’t shown or mentioned.

It’s the same thing with Alec. He saw her in church and in the moment he saw Roy, he acted like she was his true love. How could he know that? I mean, she could get a good vibe from her, but she must at least talk two times with her to realize it. There’s also a line where he says that he can see Roy’s pain in her eyes. That doesn’t look really realistic to me — they just met each other!

Things are just happening so fast. In first two episodes she was training to be a sportist, but later her friend/lover is dead, she joins a gang, she gets new LI. I would love to see a little more description of the moment when Roy killed that man. Many things happened without an explanation. I suggest slowing down a bit, because reader can get lost.

I think it also would be nice to get inside Roy’s head sometimes. She’s been through much things and she had many dilemmas. For example, she had an opinion to join the gang. What was she thinking? How she felt? Did she hesitate? It would be interesting to see her thoughts.

• Cover
The cover art is beautiful! I think that the font also matches nice. I’m obsessed with small cover.

• Title
I don’t really know what “shado” means, so I can’t write anything. It does sound mysterious, though.

• Description
I love the description! It fits with the story and sounds catchy. It really interested me in the story.

• Grammar
I didn’t notice any grammar mistakes. I just saw few sentences without fullstop.

• Directing
What I noticed is that you repeat scene where Roy says “I need to become someone else” on the start of every episode. I think that it is supposed to be intro, but I would put it only on the beginning of first or second story. The intro with cover is enough, if you ask me.

I love your work with zooms. I liked that we weren’t able to see the faces of characters in the fight scene in the first episode. What I would suggest is that you also use zooms in conversations. So instead of this:

It could be like this:


Few times I noticed props missing. Examples:

In this scene, seeing gun is important!

Animations and transitions were great!

I also found this mistake:
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It shouldn’t be zoomed like this, should it?

• Other
I loved the technique Jayden showed Roy. It’s very interesting.
I suggest making episodes 3-4 minutes longer.
I love the music and sounds choice!
Roy trying to act like tiger is interesting.

Thanks for requesting! x

Honestly I was super nervous about the review results… but I am happy that you liked it… Thank you very much…

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