I am doing a read for read where your stories will be read and reviewed by me when you read and review my story!
I have only 2 episodes so it shouldn’t be a problem for you to read it.
I will review 3-5 episodes your story(as time is a major factor for me right now)
or even more if I find it fascinating.
I would be grading you on: Plot: (out of 5). The theme of your story Grammer: (out of 5) Directing: (out of 10) Duration: (out of 5) Narration: (out of 10)how you put your story together Cover art: (out of 5)
Total : (out of 40) in percentage
And comments regarding your story.
PLEASE NOTE THAT YOU NEED TO GRADE ME IN THE SAME WAY
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Hey! I would love to this! Here is the info of my story:
Title: The Nation D: Moon Eyes
Author: P Marroquín
Number of episodes: 6 (ongoing)
Description: Heather is trapped in a place were she can’t go out, but what happens when her best friend and his dead sister offer her a way to get out of there and start a brand new life…! Where’s your new destination? And what dark secrets does it hide? Will you finally find answers to your past?
Hey! I’m going to read your story right now and reply here after I have with my review
Title: The Secret of Sherman High
Author: Margaret A. Knox
Episodes: 10 (More episodes coming soon)
Genre: Mystery (with some romance and drama)
Description: Betrayal, secrecy, romance, and scandal await you in the halls of Sherman High…
Plot : 4/5 This story has an interesting premise. I like the idea of the Hexodths and their magical abilities and Erysthius being unique, since she doesn’t have an ability yet. However, Grammar : 2/5 I found that there were many grammatical errors in your story. You may want to go back and fix them. Directing : 7/10 I like the “Susan points” idea. That’s a fun gameplay aspect. For the most part, your directing is pretty smooth. However, there are times when you could move speech bubbles so they don’t block characters’ faces. Also, you didn’t have any music until the scene where she gets the Neckl. You might want to keep that consistent. There’s a point when you play two sounds at the same time, and that is very unpleasant. Duration : 5/5 The episodes are a pretty good length. Narration : 6/10 There is a lopsided amount of narration in comparison to actual dialogue. I would love to see you show more rather than tell your readers what they should be seeing. Also, the pacing of the story is odd at times. You might want to slow it down a little to develop your characters more. Cover art : 5/5 There’s a lot going on, but that kind of works for your story. Total : 29/40 Overall, has a lot of potential.
I read your 2 chapters and here is what I think: Plot:(5/5) I think it is certainly something different and the fact that you’re using terms invented by you I suppose, It’s great, really original Grammar:(4/5) I didn’t see any spelling mistakes but I did found some parts were the grammar was like weird Directing:(8/10) You are great at coding, I saw a really net work, but sometimes the speech bubbles were a bit out of place and I think I heard two different songs at the same time at the end of one chapter Duration:(4/5) It weren’t super short chapters but I did noticed It was a bit small, I recommend you doing them 1500+ lines so you can have an average chapter Narration:(6/10) It wasn’t bad, but it could have been better, the two chapters were confusing and when you explained something it was messy and it made references to certain names that confused me way too much because of the messy explanation of them, I mean I realized my name was Erysthius at the middle of the first chapter and I got lost at the part were Aunt Marie was explaining about my parents murder Cover art:(4/5) Don’t get me wrong, it’s beautiful but at some point it seems too much, like little details that are out of place
I think your story could be way better if you check those points and you could make it a great story!
Hey, I’d like to review your story and I’d be more than happy if you could review 5 chapters of my story.
I must say that I’m not a native speaker, but I’ll try to grade the grammar anyway.
Do you want me to post the review here or private or on instragram ?
Let me know!
Here are my story details:
Title: Dark Temptation
Description: Popularity, friends and a hot boyfriend: Lia’s life is nearly perfect. But things take a darker turn when a new guy shows up and with him the truth about Lia’s identity…
Reveal the secret of Lia’s 18th birthday. Will you make the right choices?
I already pm you but i will leave it here too.
Plot 4/5 There’s background story about the MC that the readers want to know more about but the reveal of what happened to her father? I think? Was a bit anticlimactic
Grammar 3/5 It just doesnt sound right
Directing 8/10 I like the part where Susan uses her powers to wake up the MC.
Duration 5/5 Its just right
Narration 6/10 Although there were lots of narration. Do not describe the characters through narration because the readers would want to see it for themselves through dialogue.
Cover art 5/5 It has the MC in it and its simply beautiful
Total 30/40 It would have been higher if it wasnt for the narration and the grammar but everything else is good.
Plot: (out of 5). 4
Grammer: (out of 5) 5
Directing: (out of 10) 8.5
Duration: (out of 5) 4
Narration: (out of 10). 9
Cover art: (out of 5) 3
Total : (out of 40) 34.5/40
God I love your story!! It’s nearly perfect! I like how you used sound effects which added the feeling. The choices that matter is what I love as well. The cover art looks a bit plain. And I would suggest going for something more appealing. I felt like the first few episodes could be a little longer. There was some minor confusion at some points with the directing (suppose when mc spills tea on Heather it seemed confusing at first that why she was screaming) but it’s really minor! Overall… I would surely recommend it.
Plot: (out of 5). 5 I love the plot
Grammer: (out of 5) 3.5 few typos and some grammatical errors
Directing: (out of 10) 9
Duration: (out of 5) 5
Narration: (out of 10)8
Cover art: (out of 5) 3
Total : (out of 40) 35.5/40 = 89.5%
God how much I love your story. It’s definitely the one to give you chills. The only thing I didn’t like was the narration and dialogue. I felt like it isn’t really clear and “f*cks” are used way lot than necessary. I like the new backgrounds and overlays used here. But I need to admit that you are amazing at coding! Your story is marvellous and I would surely recommend it. I read all 3 and can’t wait to read more!
yeah the only reason why the words “f*ck” is used because of the character. I don’t really use that much swear words but I only did it for the sake of the personality of the character. Hope you understand.