Constitutive Criticism Needed!

I’m gonna try not to get defensive here, but I’ve been going through a lot lately, and when that happens I tend to lash out, a lot.

Backstory: Maria is emotionless and has been for years, this is the flashback of when it was officially diagnosed.

A young Maria sits on the bed

MOM (talk_unsure)
So, what’s wrong with her…?

DOCTOR (talk_sheepish_rubneck)
She’s emotionless.

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what kind of doctor would say that

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The story is about her being emotionless.

that isn’t very professional

it still sounds weird the way he put it

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Then how would you have him put it?

“By our testing and analysis, we have come to the conclusion that she exhibits no emotion. We have never seen this before and will look into this further.”
idk smth like that

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You could also show instead of tell that she’s emotionless

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Episode has no emotionless stuff to play around with. Also, you have no idea when this takes place.

It was just a suggestion…

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You can use the neutral animations.

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Because I could have already shown it for all anybody knows.

That’s what I was gonna say lmao.

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yeah there are plenty

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This is so weird (for obvious reasons)
Why is she emotionless

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Maybe have the doctor word the sentence more professionally?

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huh

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She called my story weird cuz my MC is emotionless.

I didn’t see that you fixed it my fault lol.

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and its pretty hard to get to that conclusion