Constructive criticism needed!

#1

Hi! I entered a story for the Fanastical contest and I wanted to know if anyone would like to review my story?
Please be honest and fair, I won’t get upset after all it is your opinion and You can say what you want.

BUT THERE ARE RULES:

  1. DO NOT BE NASTY AND RUDE
    & I WON’T EITHER!
  2. BE FAIR WITH YOUR CRITICISM

OVERALL JUST HAVE FUN READING MY STORY!

TITLE- Fantastical: The Mermaid
AUTHOR: Rahdia
GENRE: Fantasy
STYLE: INK
EPISODES 4 (ongoing)
DESCRIPTION: Kyle is a chef always seeking new ways to improve his cooking. One day on his search his boat accidently crashes in the forbidden waters of Gaya where he meets the guardian of the sea: A Mermaid!
LINK: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/6670380075057152

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#2

I’d be happy to exchange reviews!

Would you like to have the review put here on the forums or through private message?

Demi_Lovato_oEOk

Title: Fantastical: Welcome to the Amazon Forest
Author: XxAlphaBetaxX
Genre: Fantasy/Romance
Style: Limelight
Summary: Khalil’s life revolved around nothing but botany. That is until a search for a mystical flower transports him to a forest full of 6’+ women in the middle of a crisis. [3 endings]
Link: http://episodeinteractive.com/s/5870552734892032

#3

Private message. I will read yours soon

#4

Okie dokey!

#5

Oh! Another question. How many episodes do you require me to read?

#6

AS many as you want. It really doesn’t matter to me!

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#8

Topic closed due to one month of inactivity.

#9