Could someone read this chapter?

Hello guys!
I just started working on my story and I don’t even have a full chapter but could someone tell me is the grammar correct, does it look okay and does it seem rushed in any way?

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Hey, the grammar seems okay to me. :blue_heart:
It also doesn’t seem rushed to me! It looks good! Interesting beginning.

You can use Grammarly for free, it will point out some mistakes if they’re there in grammar or voc.

Also, I don’t know if you did that on purpose or not.
But you can’t go further than changing clothes. It doesn’t show the “done” option to continue after you’ve chosen the formal wear. :sparkling_heart:

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I just copy pasted everything 4 times so the reader can try all 3 outfits and then click the one

I will add 2 more scenes and finish this chapter. It will be a little shorter but that’s okay.

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