Could someone tell me if this is a great story?

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Character names:
Taro (Mafia Boss/ Celia’s father)
Celia (The main girl in the story)
Jesse (Celia’s mother)
Tyler (The main boy in the story)
Big joe (Another mafia group)

Summary: Celia always struggled to overcome her father’s business, she could barely encounter the outside world due to her father’s overprotectiveness. Celia wishes to please her father and do what is told, although she had enough and realized she wanted a normal life, she then receives a text message that is about to change her life.

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#2

Sounds great to me!

#3

Do you think I should change anything? Is it too cliche?

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#4

the mafia boss part is a little cliche but i love mafia cliche story. I think the unique part of your story is

And i’m guessing your story will mainly be based around that text?
Overall i like it and would read it.

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#5

Thanks!

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#6

I’ve never read a mafia story so I don’t know if it’s cliche. The only thing I know about mafia stories is that the mc falls for the boss, but that’s not gonna happen here. It sounds like a great story!

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#7

Thanks so much!

#8

I love the idea. I would say, go for it.
doesn’t matter if people say its a cliche

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#9

Honestly, it sounds like something I would definitely read! I was just wondering, is there a love interest in the story?

#10

yeah, there is. See how I put, “she then receives a text message that is about to change her life.”

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#11

That’s super mysterious and interesting!

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#12

Glad you like the idea!!

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