Could you shorten this description

hey! I was wondering if anyone would help me shorten my description without really changing it? Here it is.
Being a detective’s daughter has never been easy especially with new enemies at every corner using you as their target. what happens when your the target of a sexy illegal fighter?

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Being a detective’s daughter has never been easy, especially with enemies at every corner. What happens when you become the target of an illegal fighter?

i tried haha?? idk if it wil fit in the portal though

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please drop the sexy. its so creepy to read in a description, it just scream, this girl is gonna fall in love with her kidnaper.

I tried. it fits, but dont know it match your story

Being a detective’s daughter has never been easy, danger hides at every corner. and now I am the target of an underground fighter, out on revenge.

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Yeah I figured putting “sexy” there was tad disturbing to me and thank you for telling me this. You were just the thing to convince me “sexy” isn’t the right fit.

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