Can anyone tell me their opinion on this description:
Brooke had the perfect life, with the almost perfect family until…
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Maybe…
The life Brooke was living was great, she had everything. She thought nothing could possibly go wrong until that moment
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I think its good and it definitely has the suspense/cliff hanger feeling to it!! Its really short though, I would try adding something else to it.
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Here’s my idea:
Brooke’s life was enviable. So perfect, that anyone would trade places with her in a heartbeat. That was, until…
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To be honest, I think it’s missing something. It doesn’t explain enough about Brooke to be interesting to readers. I understand that you don’t want to reveal what happens, but “until…” doesn’t really draw the reader in. Try to be a little more specific
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