Until you were cursed, you believed your bad luck wouldn’t win. Doomed to a race against time, fears and the Devil, you have to save several souls including your broken one.
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Seven is a lucky number for everyone else. The same day you break a mirror in seven parts, you are cursed with kiss. Ahead is a journey with trials to save souls.
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I’d probably be more likely to read #1, as long as it had a few more commas. Unless you need space for other stuff, you’ve got enough character limit left for 2 more commas.
“Until you were cursed, you believed your bad luck wouldn’t win. Doomed to a race against time, fears, and the Devil, you have to save several souls, including your broken one.”