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#1

In my story, you get the choice to either play as Brett or Aria. But this has caused an error in my script. Here is the full script. Can someone tell me what I’ve done wrong?

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

sound the_backstory

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |This is a ONE EPISODE horror story...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Please turn on your sound for a better experience...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Warning : This story DOES contain flashing lights...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Please read at your own risk...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |You will be able to choose if you want to play as a boy or a girl...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |You can't customize your character as this story IS NOT the happiest story you'll read and it's better off that the character doesn't look like you...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |If you play as Aria, you'll appear on the left. Play as Brett to appear on the right.

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Do you want to play as Aria Adler...

    ARIA (react_scream_horror)
(...)

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |...or Brett Becker...

    BRETT (react_scream_horror)
(...)

choice
“I Want To Play As Aria (The Girl)…” {

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Okay...

gain mc_aria

}
“I Want To Play As Brett (The Boy)…” {

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Okay...

gain mc_brett

}

    NARRATOR
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Don't...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Turn...
| italic , bold , animation:flash |Around...

sound thunderclap2

@transition fade out black 5

sound off

EXT. CAVE - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Episode 1/1 : Truth Or Dare...

music juvie_schooldaze

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |As the bright moon shines upon you and your friends...
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |You enjoy a game of Truth OR Dare...

if (mc_aria){

    ARIA (talk_gossip)
James, Truth Or Dare!?

}else{

    BRETT (talk_gossip)
James, Truth Or Dare!?

}

    JAMES (talk_sad_exhausted)
Truth...

    JAMES (talk_confused_mindblown)
You better not ask me something gruesome!

    ZACH (talk_pointup_happy)
I have the | bold , italic |perfect| reset |question!

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Zach whispers a question into your ears as you both giggle leaving James in confusion and despair.

    JAMES (talk_complain_angry)
Zach, this better not be the question I think it is.

if (mc_aria){

    ARIA (talk_gossip)
James...

    ARIA (talk_excited_happy)
Do you fancy the boy that you sit next to in Physics?

    JAMES (talk_awkward_loop)
I---uh...

    MAYA (talk_flirt_charming)
Awhhhh, James likes Andy!

    DEE (laugh_crackup)
You guys are | bold |ghastly!

    JAMES (talk_shrug_concerned)
Well, I mean he | italic |is| reset |pretty cute...

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |You and your friends join together and say...Awhhhhhhh...
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya gives Ben a sidehug before pulling away moments later.

    DEE (talk_pointup_pretentious)
Don't try and get out of | bold |your| reset |Truth Or Dare now, Aria...

    ARIA (sigh_disappointed)
(...)

    MAYA (talk_gossip)
Aria, Truth OR Dare!?

    ARIA (think_rubchin)
(...)

choice
“Truth!” {

    ARIA (talk_armraised_sad)
Give me a truth...

}
“Dare!” {

    ARIA (talk_armraised_sad)
Give me a dare...

}

music off

@pause for 2

    DEE (talk_think_neutral)
Aren't you going to give her one, Maya?

    MAYA (talk_shrug_neutral)
I'm thinking.

sound ambient_electrojunglefade

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |A wave of STRONG WIND blows across your body.
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The atmosphere gets colder...and colder...

@ARIA is idle_shiver_cold_loop

    ZACH (idle_blowhands_cold_loop)
Why is it so cold all of a sudden!?

    JAMES (talk_sad_exhausted)
The storm must be starting earlier than usual.

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Suddenly, a MORTIFYING shadow appears behind Maya.

sound off

    DEE (react_scream_horror)
(...)

music music_sparseandcreepy

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
| animation:flash |myyyyyy turnnnnn...

@JAMES is react_mortified

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The shadow's body lingers around the group choosing a victim.
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |DEATH!

sound scream_female_warped

music off

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya screams as the shadow turns into a creature and proceeds to strangle her...
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Blood pours out of Maya's mouth as her organs all spurt out.

    MAYA (react_scream_horror)
HELPPPPP!

sound scream_female_warped

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
Who are you!?

    DEE (talk_complain_angry)
| bold |STOP!

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya collapses onto the floor as the creature sits on her wooden stump.

    ARIA (idle_terrified_loop)
(Maya...)

    JAMES (talk_argument_angry)
Guys, we gotta run.

    ARIA (talk_confused_mindblown)
What about Maya!

    JAMES (talk_argue_angry)
We can't do anything about her now!

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |You and the other get up to run but a force keeps you down.

    ZACH (talk_complain_angry)
LEAVE US ALONE, CREATURE!

music music_danger

    SHADOW (scream_angry)
| animation:flash |meeee playyyy...

    DEE (talk_angry)
What even are you!?

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The creature doesn't reply to Dee.

    SHADOW (talk_argue_defensive)
| animation:flash |Playyyyyy theeee gameeeee rightttttt...
| animation:flash |Tooooo liveeee anotherrr dayyyy...

    ZACH (talk_argue_angry)
Fine! We'll play this stupid game with you!

    ZACH (talk_accuse_angry)
As long as you let us go!

    SHADOW (talk_reassure_neutral)
Deallllll...

    SHADOW (talk_armscrossed_condescending_loop)
Jamesssss...
Truthhhh Orrr Dareeee...

    JAMES (talk_afraid)
I think I'll go with a dare...

    SHADOW (talk_armscrossed_angry_loop)
I dareeee youuuu tooooo jumpppp intoooo the lakeeee.

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
Are you stupid!?

    JAMES (talk_complain_angry)
You must be mad if you think I'm doing that!

    ARIA (talk_sad_exhausted)
James...

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
Are you sureeeeeeeee?

    ZACH (talk_sad_exhausted)
He's going to do it for you...

    JAMES (react_mortified)
(...)

    NARRATOR
In an instant, James flies into the air and splashes into the dark and gloomy lake!

    ARIA (cry_sob_sad_loop)
(James...)

    ZACH (talk_argue_angry)
What do you want!?

    NARRATOR
The scary shadow makes it's way towards Zach.

    ARIA (talk_armraised_sad)
Please, choose a truth, Zach!

    DEE (talk_argument_angry)
Maybe then you won't fly into a river.

    NARRATOR
You take a deepbreath as you see Maya's bloody organs ripped on the floor and not knowing where James is.

    SHADOW (talk_excited_happy)
Zachhhhh...

    SHADOW (talk_argument_angry)
Doooo youuuu rememberrrrr a timeeee whennnn youuuu trieddddd to MURDER Noahhh.....

    ZACH (talk_confused_mindblown)
What!?

    SHADOW (talk_argument_angry)
Do you rememberrr a timeee whennn youuuu killedddd Noahhh.

    SHADOW (talk_bangdoor_intense)
And saidddd he comitted suicide.....



    DEE (react_gasp_dismayed)
(...)

    ARIA (react_scream_horror)
(...)

    SHADOW (talk_argue_defensive)
Speakkkk theeee truthhhh or end upppp withhhhh your organsssss onnnn the flooorrrrr.

    ARIA (idle_sad_timid_loop)
(Did he really try to kill Noah?)

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
Theeee onlyyyy reasonnnn heeee killledddd himselffff, was because offfff youuuu.

    SHADOW (talk_angry)
Now tellll meeee...

sound dundundun

    ZACH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Yes, I DID kill him...

music off

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INT. BLACK - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
| bold , animation:flash |Three years ago...

music music_suspensefulstringhits

EXT. JUNKYARD MAZE - NIGHT

@ZACH changes into ZACH_Fight

    ZACH (talk_fight_angry_loop)
If you think you're so hard, then throw me a swing!

    NOAH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Zach, please just forgive m--

    NARRATOR
Before Noah can finish the sentence, Zayn throws a punch to NOah's head.
He then pulls a gun out of his pocket and shoots Noah on the chest.

sound gunshot

    ZACH (talk_gossip)
Now, no one will know that I killed you.

    NARRATOR
Noah falls onto the ground.
Zach places the gun in Noah's hand before running off.

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EXT. CAVE - NIGHT

    ARIA (talk_argue_angry)
Zach!

    NARRATOR
The shadow re-emerges into Noah...

    NOAH (talk_accuse_angry)
Zach, you are dead!

    ZACH (talk_armscrossed_condescending_loop)
My plan has worked out perfectly!

    NARRATOR
Zach's eyes turn bright red as he flies into the air.

@ZACH previews eyesColor Red

    ZACH (talk_complain_angry)
YOU WILL ALL BURN!

    DEE (talk_argue_angry)
Zach! STOP!

    NOAH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Guys, we need to run!

    DEE (talk_repulsed)
What's happened to him?

    NOAH (talk_confused_mindblown)
He's taken my role! He was the powers now!

    NARRATOR
Without another word, Zach motions you all into the air.

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
STOP THAT!

    NARRATOR
But it's too late, you, Noah and Dee are too late.

music off

    ZACH (talk_argument_angry)
| bold |BURNNNN!

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INT. ISLAND BEDROOM - NIGHT

music music_melancholy
@ARIA changes into ARIA_Bra

    ARIA (react_scream_horror)
(...)

    ARIA (think_rubchin)
(Huh?)

ARIA (talk_exhausted)
It was just a dream...

ARIA (talk_sad_serious_loop)
James being flung into the water...
Maya's organs being exposed onto the ground...
Zach turning into a ghoul...
Noah dying...

ARIA (talk_sad_atcamera)
None of that happened.

@ARIA is deepbreath

ARIA (talk_reassure_neutral)
I should be glad!

music off

NARRATOR
You make your way out of bed to go downstairs and fetch a cup of water.

sound thunderclap2

ZACH (idle_happy_loop)
(Oh, Aria...)

@transition fade out black 3

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

music shortmusic_attitudesynthpop

NARRATOR
| bold |Thanks for reading this HALLOWEEN SPECIAL!
| bold |To re-read as Brett instead, just play the next episode!
| bold |Follow me on instagram (@benaiah_episode) for more exciting stories...











} else {

BRETT (talk_gossip)
James...

    BRETT (talk_excited_happy)
Do you fancy the boy that you sit next to in Physics?

    JAMES (talk_awkward_loop)
I---uh...

    MAYA (talk_flirt_charming)
Awhhhh, James likes Andy!

    DEE (laugh_crackup)
You guys are | bold |ghastly!

    JAMES (talk_shrug_concerned)
Well, I mean he | italic |is| reset |pretty cute...

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |You and your friends join together and say...Awhhhhhhh...
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya gives Ben a sidehug before pulling away moments later.

    DEE (talk_pointup_pretentious)
Don't try and get out of | bold |your| reset |Truth Or Dare now, Aria...

    BRETT (sigh_disappointed)
(...)

    MAYA (talk_gossip)
Aria, Truth OR Dare!?

    BRETT (think_rubchin)
(...)

choice
“Truth!” {

    BRETT (talk_armraised_sad)
Give me a truth...

}
“Dare!” {

    BRETT (talk_armraised_sad)
Give me a dare...

}

}

music off

@pause for 2

    DEE (talk_think_neutral)
Aren't you going to give her one, Maya?

    MAYA (talk_shrug_neutral)
I'm thinking.

sound ambient_electrojunglefade

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |A wave of STRONG WIND blows across your body.
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The atmosphere gets colder...and colder...

@BRETT is idle_shiver_cold_loop

    ZACH (idle_blowhands_cold_loop)
Why is it so cold all of a sudden!?

    JAMES (talk_sad_exhausted)
The storm must be starting earlier than usual.

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Suddenly, a MORTIFYING shadow appears behind Maya.

sound off

    DEE (react_scream_horror)
(...)

music music_sparseandcreepy

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
| animation:flash |myyyyyy turnnnnn...

@JAMES is react_mortified

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The shadow's body lingers around the group choosing a victim.
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |DEATH!

sound scream_female_warped

music off

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya screams as the shadow turns into a creature and proceeds to strangle her...
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Blood pours out of Maya's mouth as her organs all spurt out.

    MAYA (react_scream_horror)
HELPPPPP!

sound scream_female_warped

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
Who are you!?

    DEE (talk_complain_angry)
| bold |STOP!

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |Maya collapses onto the floor as the creature sits on her wooden stump.

    BRETT (idle_terrified_loop)
(Maya...)

    JAMES (talk_argument_angry)
Guys, we gotta run.

    BRETT (talk_confused_mindblown)
What about Maya!

    JAMES (talk_argue_angry)
We can't do anything about her now!

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |You and the other get up to run but a force keeps you down.

    ZACH (talk_complain_angry)
LEAVE US ALONE, CREATURE!

music music_danger

    SHADOW (scream_angry)
| animation:flash |meeee playyyy...

    DEE (talk_angry)
What even are you!?

    NARRATOR
| animation:shuffle-sideways , bold |The creature doesn't reply to Dee.

    SHADOW (talk_argue_defensive)
| animation:flash |Playyyyyy theeee gameeeee rightttttt...
| animation:flash |Tooooo liveeee anotherrr dayyyy...

    ZACH (talk_argue_angry)
Fine! We'll play this stupid game with you!

    ZACH (talk_accuse_angry)
As long as you let us go!

    SHADOW (talk_reassure_neutral)
Deallllll...

    SHADOW (talk_armscrossed_condescending_loop)
Jamesssss...
Truthhhh Orrr Dareeee...

    JAMES (talk_afraid)
I think I'll go with a dare...

    SHADOW (talk_armscrossed_angry_loop)
I dareeee youuuu tooooo jumpppp intoooo the lakeeee.

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
Are you stupid!?

    JAMES (talk_complain_angry)
You must be mad if you think I'm doing that!

    BRETT (talk_sad_exhausted)
James...

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
Are you sureeeeeeeee?

    ZACH (talk_sad_exhausted)
He's going to do it for you...

    JAMES (react_mortified)
(...)

    NARRATOR
In an instant, James flies into the air and splashes into the dark and gloomy lake!

    BRETT (cry_sob_sad_loop)
(James...)

    ZACH (talk_argue_angry)
What do you want!?

    NARRATOR
The scary shadow makes it's way towards Zach.

    BRETT (talk_armraised_sad)
Please, choose a truth, Zach!

    DEE (talk_argument_angry)
Maybe then you won't fly into a river.

    NARRATOR
You take a deepbreath as you see Maya's bloody organs ripped on the floor and not knowing where James is.

    SHADOW (talk_excited_happy)
Zachhhhh...

    SHADOW (talk_argument_angry)
Doooo youuuu rememberrrrr a timeeee whennnn youuuu trieddddd to MURDER Noahhh.....

    ZACH (talk_confused_mindblown)
What!?

    SHADOW (talk_argument_angry)
Do you rememberrr a timeee whennn youuuu killedddd Noahhh.

    SHADOW (talk_bangdoor_intense)
And saidddd he comitted suicide.....



    DEE (react_gasp_dismayed)
(...)

    BRETT (react_scream_horror)
(...)

    SHADOW (talk_argue_defensive)
Speakkkk theeee truthhhh or end upppp withhhhh your organsssss onnnn the flooorrrrr.

    BRETT (idle_sad_timid_loop)
(Did he really try to kill Noah?)

    SHADOW (frighten_boo)
Theeee onlyyyy reasonnnn heeee killledddd himselffff, was because offfff youuuu.

    SHADOW (talk_angry)
Now tellll meeee...

sound dundundun

    ZACH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Yes, I DID kill him...

music off

@transition fade out black 0.2
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INT. BLACK - NIGHT

    NARRATOR
| bold , animation:flash |Three years ago...

music music_suspensefulstringhits

EXT. JUNKYARD MAZE - NIGHT

@ZACH changes into ZACH_Fight

    ZACH (talk_fight_angry_loop)
If you think you're so hard, then throw me a swing!

    NOAH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Zach, please just forgive m--

    NARRATOR
Before Noah can finish the sentence, Zayn throws a punch to NOah's head.
He then pulls a gun out of his pocket and shoots Noah on the chest.

sound gunshot

    ZACH (talk_gossip)
Now, no one will know that I killed you.

    NARRATOR
Noah falls onto the ground.
Zach places the gun in Noah's hand before running off.

@transition fade out black 0.2
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EXT. CAVE - NIGHT

    BRETT (talk_argue_angry)
Zach!

    NARRATOR
The shadow re-emerges into Noah...

    NOAH (talk_accuse_angry)
Zach, you are dead!

    ZACH (talk_armscrossed_condescending_loop)
My plan has worked out perfectly!

    NARRATOR
Zach's eyes turn bright red as he flies into the air.

@ZACH previews eyesColor Red

    ZACH (talk_complain_angry)
YOU WILL ALL BURN!

    DEE (talk_argue_angry)
Zach! STOP!

    NOAH (talk_sad_exhausted)
Guys, we need to run!

    DEE (talk_repulsed)
What's happened to him?

    NOAH (talk_confused_mindblown)
He's taken my role! He was the powers now!

    NARRATOR
Without another word, Zach motions you all into the air.

    DEE (talk_accuse_angry)
STOP THAT!

    NARRATOR
But it's too late, you, Noah and Dee are too late.

music off

    ZACH (talk_argument_angry)
| bold |BURNNNN!

@transition fade out white 0.5
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INT. ISLAND BEDROOM - NIGHT

music music_melancholy
@BRETT changes into BRETT_PJ

    BRETT (react_scream_horror)
(...)

    BRETT (think_rubchin)
(Huh?)

BRETT (talk_exhausted)
It was just a dream...

BRETT (talk_sad_serious_loop)
James being flung into the water...
Maya's organs being exposed onto the ground...
Zach turning into a ghoul...
Noah dying...

BRETT (talk_sad_atcamera)
None of that happened.

@BRETT is deepbreath

BRETT (talk_reassure_neutral)
I should be glad!

music off

NARRATOR
You make your way out of bed to go downstairs and fetch a cup of water.

sound thunderclap2

ZACH (idle_happy_loop)
(Oh, Brett...)

@transition fade out black 3

INT. BLACK - NIGHT

music shortmusic_attitudesynthpop

NARRATOR
| bold |Thanks for reading this HALLOWEEN SPECIAL!
| bold |To re-read as Aria instead, just play the next episode!
| bold |Follow me on instagram (@benaiah_episode) for more exciting stories...

}


#2

}“I Want To Play As Brett (The Boy)…”{


#3

Moved to Directing Helps and Tips since this is about scripting. Make sure to check out our Forum Tutorial for more info about where to correctly create topics, and feel to ask me if there are any questions. :wink:


#4

Thank yuuu


#5

it still says error :frowning:


#6

Can you show me the script?


#7

OHH you did this:

}- delete this
“I Want To Play As Brett (The Boy)…” {

when you were supposed to do this:

}“I Want To Play A Brett (The Boy)…”{


#8

@Stargazer54 that’s completely fine to write.

An option within a choice should look like this:

} “Random Option” {

or

}
“Random Option” {

However you can’t skip a line by writing this:

}

“Random Option” {

Nope, it should always come right after.