After losing her parents, being homeless AND being abused by her boyfriend. Nadia gives up on love, Can Nova cure her now stone heart or will the mysterious Damon get in the way?
If not, please comment down below on how to better it.
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To start off make sure the loss of her parents and being homeless is realistic. Make sure that the abuse isn’t romanticized either. And all together, the LI does not need to be a bad boy. Personally, I think a better plot would include Nova finding her own way to heal.
Okay, but I used bad boy to give it a little more flavor because I didn’t just want to say “Or will Damon get in the way.” It seems dull. But I understand what you are saying about finding her own way. So she seems like a strong independent woman! I like it! Thanks for the feedback! And what do you mean by realistic when she’s homeless and she loses her parents?
I don’t know how to exactly explain it, but maybe ask people about their experiences and integrate that into your story. Or put yourself in the character’s shoes as to how they’d react to the turn of events. Overall, I think you’ll do fine though.
There needs to be a twist, something.
Thanks!
What do you mean?
Something like a part how the abused started, not some cliche line like when I saw him, it was like love at my side, but I never expected this
Some people just write about abusers without knowing the facts try reading some articles
So what do you think it should say?
I will!
I’m sorry, I just do not like the phrase bad boy. It’s overdone and a bad cliché. The rest of it sounds interesting, just if you could somehow rephrase the “bad boy” part I would read the story. Hopefully this isn’t too mean and it’s just my personal preference 
I knew that was gonna hinder people’s opinion because of the bad boy and gang cliches, so what do you suggest I use instead? What do you think of using “mysterious” instead?
I said no just because it’s not my kind of story 
Okay, thanks anyways for your opinion!
Yeah, mysterious personally sounds more intriguing and original to me.
I voted no because I see this style of description a bit too frequently (e.i. cold-female lead with a tragic past finds love). Perhaps reversing the order, “Damon is determined to steal the heart of Nova- who can’t feel love due to a traumatic past- but is she too far gone?”
It’s sound interesting, but I don’t think you have to explain all of the hardships and abuse in the description. It’s okay to be a little vague, the readers can find out in the story. I’m going to assume you aren’t, but please remember that with all the trauma your character is going through, it won’t easily be fixed by love.Quick side note: I hope this didn’t come off mean or anything 
, I just get worried whenever authors brush off serious trauma their MC goes through just so the can have a romantic plot…
Nova is a love interest and Damon. Nadia is the MC
What do you suggest I write? I know that it can’t be easily fixed, love will just bring her temporary happiness that she will fix in the story with therapy.