hi @meadowh! i’ve taken the the time to review your story, here is my review on Trapped!
Story Title: Trapped
Plot Rating: 9/10
Directing Rating: 9/10
What I Liked About Your Story: I really liked the plot of your story! You did a very nice job making the story flow. I also like that you introduced the character’s traits through their actions and what they say instead of just having a long narration bubble explaining every detail. Will be reading more! Job well done.
What I Disliked About Your Story: Only one instance where the spot directing was weird. When the MC first arrived at the campus in the limo, she walked in front of the limo first, then she disappeared, teleported back, and re entered but this time behind the limo. Also when the characters are walking to a spot placement, they walk pretty fast, almost like they’re too teleporting to the spot. Try adding a time to when they walk so it seems more natural.
Overall Opinion: Love the plot idea! I found everything overall good about your story, just wish there were some choices.
Overall Rating: 9/10