Episode 1 of Werewolf story- Feedback Needed Please


#1

Here is the link-

If you wouldn’t mind, give me feedback so I can make a good first impression on the readers.

Also, if you would like to submit a character request, you can do that on my other Topic I started. You can just go through my profile. You can also Submit your Love Interest for your character.

I need a lot of characters, A LOT, so you’ll likely get in. Thanks!


#2

Its a great start! Always add talking animations each time they speak. Otherwise it looks weird when the speech bubble is there and they arent doing anything lol Also maybe make the episode a tad bit longer. Give some more detail with a juicy ending. The first episode is the most important. You want them to want to come back and use their passes. Other than that keep up the good work. i look forward to seeing how the story progresses. :heart_eyes::heart_eyes::heart_eyes:


#3

Thanks! Is their Anything specific you think I should change?


#4

Closing due to one month of inactivity :slight_smile:


#5

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