I’ll be taking @blue.moon.writes’s review request! (I believe someone else is doing the other two maybe?)
Episode Harmony's Official Story Review/ R4R Exchange/ Recommendation Thread *CLOSE UNTIL FINISH STORY REVIEWS!*
No one has reviewed @Rainbowcat her story right? Because I will be reviewing hers then
Is it okay if I ask who will offer to review my story?
Hello, Andrea - thank you!
@Days Here’s my review on your story. I’ve added both my opinions and directing help and tips for you to improve your quality!
First scene: The couple. You have a problem with the characters’ layers and it just feels weird not pretending like the man’s elbow is not poking the woman’s eyes… If you don’t know what I’m talking about, check out this thread.
HOW TO: Move Characters / Overlays to the Layers
Next scene: I didn’t know it was a MOVIE??? BRUHHHH
I love the BFF
Your music is sometimes too loud and sudden. Try and edit your volume so that your music will be “fade in” or “fade out”. Don’t use “music off” too often. Here’s the code:
volume music % #
% is the volume of the music or sound that you use from 0 to 100
# is the numver of milliseconds ( so if you want your music to fade out in 2 sec, write it like 2000
- I can see that you’re a skilled director! But there’s an error after the flashback scene with the filter. You should use &reset hsl instead of @reset hsl when you have the transition that fade in white. And the zoom right after seems a bit off because it’s caused by the @reset hsl thing.
- You don’t have any problems with grammar mistakes and spelling!! Great job!
- Speechbubble problems! You sometimes have the speechbubbles placed on the character’s face and it blocks the whole thing! Try to edit them and have them placed somewhere lower instead!
- “About what you said back home…”
- “Guys treat us badly, we can’t go through waht happened again!”
- Your story is funny and really enjoyable. It’s nice to have some comedy in it!
- The choices are indeed IMPORTANT. Great job! I love choices that matter in the story!
- YASSSS the last dialog!!! Title reference!!! LOVE ITTTT
OMG GIRL YOU BE SAVING LIVES (that reset hsl thing has been bugging me for an eternity!), I’ll make sure to fix up the parts you mentioned and I’ll fix those details. Thank you and yes, you noticed the little reference hehe
Anyone need me to review a story? I could totally help!
Yayay thx can you do some now
Sure. Which one you need me to do? And how many episodes should I be doing?
Can you done of these
Like pick one
Which ones are taken?
@blue.moon.writes is taken
I’ll do @S_Unique if you’re not going in order. How many episodes?
Choose how many episodes you wanna read
Alright. I’ll start it!